No Worries

I'm not really a big fan of really short poems but this one I like just because it's brief and straight to the point.

to me it sounded mysterious and abit dark. I like the use of the simple language and it really got my attention.

I really like it so keep up the good work and keep writing!


-TheDarkWriter

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Hey Glados, or jupiter, whichever you prefer.

Anyway. I can relate to this poem. I used to feel reaaaaaly freaking scared before presenting my projects. Then I just stopped caring. In my last year of High School I just had conversations with students and teachers, and I always got the highest grade (for involving the audience in the presentation).

Apparently, it is possible, but I realize yours was a rhetorical question (if it was a question at all). I understand what it is like, to be afraid of going wrong, getting a bad grade, or looking bad in the eyes of your teacher or co-students. I get it, you are afraid of going wrong. But, if you are afraid of being wrong, will you be ever able to be wrong? In the end, do we not learn from our mistakes?

This is what I thought about while reading this poem. Maybe it's just me overthinking things due to intoxication, but that is what I honestly thought when reading this poem.

And this is advice: being brave is being afraid of something, and still being able to do it anyway. #wisedrunkwords

Stay awesome, Joop. I hope this review does something, like you know, encourage or whatnot. I did my best with it, and it was pretty hard under such conditions. Anyway, I hope you enjoyed it, if not, enjoy the rest of your day!

This short poem caught my attention, when I noticed that the title contrasted with your closing line, to throw a spanner in the works and dice up expectations. I also noticed the lack of capital letters, which may have been intentional or a simple lack of attention to detail. However, I reckon it's the former.

Your poem is really sad, and appeals to emotion without being preachy- which is always nice. It appeals to the reader to relate to the speaker's predicament, inviting us to imagine to be in their shoes. I get the impression that the narrator suffers from social anxiety, given how even a "simple project" is a daunting task for them. This poem is all about nerves, and you illustrate it really well with the lack of punctuation, how rushed their thoughts are. Not only that, but I actually feel sorry for your narrator, which is hard to accomplish.

My only gripe with this poem is the fact that it is so short, in that the emotional impact could be greater if you expanded on the character and their situation. That way, it can go from being a good poem to a great one. Also, that metaphor of unflattering light did not seem to fit into the poem, though this is merely a matter of personal preference.

A good poem. Well done.

Hey, Minty here for a review

Let me start by saying that I can connect to this poem so much, with having fears of presenting or reading aloud, so I automatically can relate to this.

I don't love how only these two lines rhyme

or what you look like; in front of unflattering light

if only that were possible