Young Writers Society

Hey DeepRoses!

This poem is so neat. I love math things! I thought it was great that the relationship followed the order of operations. Funny!

do not let the little things confuse you, my dear
i tell you not only but the truth
the value of our love can be multiplied
I beg you to let me in again

First of all, the fourth line has a capital I- as does the last stanza at least. You might just want to make sure your capitalization choices are all consistent! Also, I think you could have a stronger connection here than multiplied- you have another stanza for that, after all. You could say, "our love is exponential" or "I'm raised to the power of you" or "let's square up" or something. I'm not really sure, but those are just some I thought of.

I think that overall, you could squeeze a few more math things in there, not just one per stanza. And I don't think it's really necessary to underline the ones you use, but that's a style choice you can make. You've got these wonderfully titled sections, and I suggest using them to their fullest! Go from subtle to conspicuous or whatever you want. Also, I thought it would be neat if you had signs next to each title instead of colons. For example, -Subraction- +Addition+ (Parenthesis) -it could be cool! But only if you want to do that.

Love this poem! Math is love.

-Falco