A/N: Sorry if this is hard to read. This poem is copyright The Collective Collective 2013. I was searching through my old poetry and found this group poem we wrote in Creative Writing last summer at camp. There's a reason for the format, and I apologize if it's tricky to read. 
Yes some of it's irrelevant. Please ask any questions. I will post an explanation to my wall. I always laugh when I read this!
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I really liked this, especially the style it was written. The only question I have is:
At the end (or I might be reading this wrong) it says: a toilet, untouched for two years, because of eight
Eight what? Why eight? Please explain, because I'm sure it's something humorous.
I really liked how the format made it seem as if you are walking down stairs. Your group had a good sense of humor, too.
I also really liked this line/step:
The color of darkness that isn't quite black.
Really nice description there, I loved it.
Overall rating: 8.5/10
I explained it all on my wall, but we were supposed to write down what we thought when we heard 'Scary Things in Basements.' We had to write it down on a piece of paper and pass it around. Our words were covered up, so the next person couldn't read the previous line. That's why a lot of it didn't connenct XD I totally don't understand what 'eight' meant. I can't remember. I'm thinking '8' as an age, but I have no idea.
Oh, lol. Well, it's really good for that sort of writing, actually. Maybe they meant 8 years its been untouched, not 2? Idk lol
This was a really good read lol For some reason, I really like the style in which this is written.. It's very different, and I like different. It's suspenseful, funny, and the jumbledness kind of adds to the whole feel the poem is trying to create.
To me, it kind of represents random thoughts that happen when you're afraid. Or something to that extend.
What a talented class.
I'm so glad you pointed this out for me to read! I enjoyed it, I was scared and I was laughing and I was in suspense. I think I like the beginning the most, scratch that, I love it.
And I love the formatting too. Kind of makes me think that each word is a sound or a flicker of light scattered across what you thought was an empty basement.
I only didn't understand the ending. EIGHT WHAT!? Eight year olds? Is eight a person or a thing? Gah, it's that one piece missing from the puzzle.
Your class is super talented! I really like this creative writing idea!
Keep expressing.
-Percybeth
See I didn't understand that either XD
I don't know who wrote that part
Hey Retro here.
Well there isn't much to review being as it is a group piece so obviously it is pretty well rounded!
I just really wanted to say that this is an excellent piece of writing and you should all be proud! You've got beauitful imagery and ideas and contradictory messages which all work well together. Your form, albeit off putting, encapsulates all those themes and ideas and makes an excellent poem. And within the simplicity you've actually created fear which is sublime.
Well done guys
*liked*
~Retro