Oh myyyy, when Grace was a newbie!
(Do not look at my newbie poem...it's embarrassing xD)
Okay. This is weird, but I don't think purple and red look together. Blue waves? I know that's not as cool, but it helps my OCD xD
Okay, now let me actually read the poem...
So, the first line is "Close Together" Why is together capitalized? It's not capitalized anywhere else in the poem. As my poetry style goes, I always capitalize words that are super important to the poem. And usually if something's so important I will repeat it in the Title or the rest of the poem has it stuck in there somewhere.
And now that I look at the other reviews I see recreating has already commented on the matter. *sigh* Well, I guess now you see our reasoning. Onward!
Another thing, although small, noticeable and slightly confusing for a reader. Punctuation. You have commas here and there, and sometimes no punctuation at all! So that's something to look at, to keep the flow better.
Now, if this wasn't your first of many works on here I would say something about making your own personal style, and how this sometimes takes a long time to do, but since I have seen more of your poetry, I must compliment you. You have started to get a feel for what kind of flow and structure you want your poems to have, so that's a plus.
I also must compliment you on how much you've improved! Well done
Onto another poem of yours :p
-Kamryn
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