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Ah. Another angst poem. I love this kind of feelings and poem. Why most of us keep writing some kind of poem like this. Probably because life is not a Walk in a Park. And people just want to express our own feelings. Maybe you did the same here.
I have to be honest with you, I like these kind of things. I like how most of us always express our feelings through poems and stories and music. It's like this is just how life can be. And because of that I like your poem!
You made a great start with this. And you make a great ending too. Your opening already explain what's the poem about which is a person battling life and suicidal which was cutting their wrist. And i think you dedicate it to a friend of yours? I have to say my friends to cut themselves to be honest.
I like how you put so much feelings here. The flow of the rhythm of the pen. Good too!you describe everything sl well. And you already put this poem into someone life! I rarely find this kind of poems! And I'm so glad you did this! It might be emotional and painful. But you wake enough people from reality!
The closing or if you like to call it the last stanza was also great. I like the sentence where you say:
There is still an ugly story
behind each and every scar.
While they may own my past,
I know that I own my future.
They show at least some positive thought here even though they are experiencing some bad situation already. They already finding hope here! And i can't believe you wrote this as a wonderful ending.
That's all I wanna! Sorry if its all a mess or something. I just dont know how to express what I wanna write here because it so plainly good. And tell your friend that they are so brave to fight and deal with their problem. You are a great poetic writer. Great Job once again!
-ILoveBooks123
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