Hey Bball41,

I like that you've kept this poem short and sweet. It is a waterfall of emotions to the person it is dedicated to. Since it is not for everybody, we all might not be able to relate to it. But this doesn't make it any less of a sweet poem. And I like the fact that you've written it to near perfection in terms of para-phrasing , punctuation and grammar.
All in all, it is a short poem but the emotions are elaborate. Happy writing

- Ishita Dutt

A cute little ditty overall. I appreciate how small and to the point it is.
I really like the "promise-always-never" Pattern you have written here, yet as a conclusion, you answer the unanswered question of 'why?' This work: I don't find any real mistakes based on grammar or punctuation, or any problems with flow of speech.
The emotions are crisp, and hopeful, and I commend you for your work! Great job, and keep writing!

Hi , nice romantic message for a darling. The beauty of the poem lies in the message. I love this line ' i prromise to treat you right', it shows the respect a girl needs from every guy never matters how personal the relationship is. I like the message because it goes straight to heart.

But i feel like the words canbe more modified beautifully. While reading i felt like the same thing is going on and on. Instead of repetition there could have been some beautiful comparisons and similies. It was good but could have been the best.

Overall everything in the poem was beautiful and message was simple and clear' to be with you forever.' I loved the idea of respect and care rather than the romance in the poem.

Well the poem was simple and sweet. One can clearly understand what you want to express and that comes out nicely in the poem.

But the poem is too simple therein lies the problem also. You could have used some strong words to convey your emotions. You could have made your poem a bit longer too.
Not that there is any problem, but you know, to leave a deep impact on the person who reads it.

Overall, its a really good poem to read. It can cheer up someone lonely.

Myjaspercat here for a review...

Alright now, so this poem is cute, it kind of in a way makes me smile so good job on that. But I want to add a few little nitpicks so you could make this better, that being said onwards...

1.) "I promise to be there for you.
To never leave you lonely.
To always hold you tight.
I promise to protect you.
To always have your back.
To never leave your side."
---Hum... well really I'm adding this in my nitpicks because the beginning of these six lines repeat the same thing. 'I promise', 'To never', 'To always'. Now this wouldn't be that bad, but it makes your poem sound to repetitive and it just kind of drags down the flow of the rest of the story.

2.) "To always hold you tight.
I promise to protect you.
To always have your back.
To never leave your side."
---This is being added to the nitpicks because I feel that they repeat the same thing, just using different words. When you write poetry, you want to make sure you aren't repeating much (especially when you write love poetry; which is what this looks like).

Now those are the two top nitpicks that really needed reviewing from this poem. Please don't think that because I haven't written much (or that what I have written lacks) means I'm just trying to get points because it doesn't. Honestly, this is one poem that I have read that I don't think needs that much work. The concept is there, the feeling is there and yes a few touch ups would be nice but it isn't bad. So now that I got that out of the way I want to do a quick overview.

For one in my opinion (as both a writer and a reader) I do think you could add a little more imagery to your poem. However, you do display a nice feeling here with the description you have, but if you added a little more complex detail, it would make the feeling of the poem stronger.

Another small problem I found was that you kind of repeated words, specifically 'you', 'I', and 'promise'; I get that this poem is about a promise to someone but by repeating these words that much it makes your poem lag and eventually feel unfinished (which will leave your reader unsatisfied.) Instead, you could cut down on words that aren't needed by combing lines that wouldn't harm the flow.

Anyways, all together I like it. Whoever this is for, I think they will like it to. The feeling that you put into the poem is there and it's nice. So again, I hope I helped and if you have questions about my review or help you.

Whoa bball such a touching poem.Surely you must keep writing and your sincerity towards the poem can be seen ...well done

Hello Bball41,
Myjaspercat here for a review...

Alright now, so this poem is cute, it kind of in a way makes me smile so good job on that. But I want to add a few little nitpicks so you could make this better, that being said onwards...

1.) "I promise to be there for you.
To never leave you lonely.
To always hold you tight.
I promise to protect you.
To always have your back.
To never leave your side."
---Hum... well really I'm adding this in my nitpicks because the beginning of these six lines repeat the same thing. 'I promise', 'To never', 'To always'. Now this wouldn't be that bad, but it makes your poem sound to repetitive and it just kind of drags down the flow of the rest of the story.

2.) "To always hold you tight.
I promise to protect you.
To always have your back.
To never leave your side."
---This is being added to the nitpicks because I feel that they repeat the same thing, just using different words. When you write poetry, you want to make sure you aren't repeating much (especially when you write love poetry; which is what this looks like).

Now those are the two top nitpicks that really needed reviewing from this poem. Please don't think that because I haven't written much (or that what I have written lacks) means I'm just trying to get points because it doesn't. Honestly, this is one poem that I have read that I don't think needs that much work. The concept is there, the feeling is there and yes a few touch ups would be nice but it isn't bad. So now that I got that out of the way I want to do a quick overview.

For one in my opinion (as both a writer and a reader) I do think you could add a little more imagery to your poem. However, you do display a nice feeling here with the description you have, but if you added a little more complex detail, it would make the feeling of the poem stronger.

Another small problem I found was that you kind of repeated words, specifically 'you', 'I', and 'promise'; I get that this poem is about a promise to someone but by repeating these words that much it makes your poem lag and eventually feel unfinished (which will leave your reader unsatisfied.) Instead, you could cut down on words that aren't needed by combing lines that wouldn't harm the flow.

Anyways, all together I like it. Whoever this is for, I think they will like it to. The feeling that you put into the poem is there and it's nice. So again, I hope I helped and if you have questions about my review or help you need feel free to ask. ---Myjaspercat

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"I turned out liking you a lot more than I originally planned."--Unknown

"A poem begins as a lump in the throat, a sense of wrong, a homesickness, a lovesickness." --Robert Frost