Hey! I thought this poem (coming from an athlete) was very inspirational and maybe motivation for others not so athletic. What struck me the most was definitely the repetition. It made is a more meaningful poem. You could feel that the writer had experienced the failure, the pain, and the work. It put described a feeling that many get while playing sports. This was an interesting topic for a poem and not an easy poem to write about but you did an excellent job. Keep writing <3

Sarah24

Hello!

I'm back Bball41, As you can't remember I review some of your poem!

Happy Review Day by the way!

Anyway I like this poem about an athlete! Even though I'm not an athlete myself seriously I'm not into physical activities. It's like my weakness. But I know what it is feel. If I put this on other way. Other people can relate to it. And its very inspiring to everyone else mostly to athletes out there. Wave if you are an athlete!

I like what's your format of the story. I like how you always put Because I am an athlete at the end of each stanza. It symbolize the topic of the poem and the title of the poem. I love you! Bravo! 10/10!


I dont care if its redundant. It was perfect to be honest. You explain everything already! I love it! Just like I said!

I think you are trying to point here the failure and success and passion at the same time. I think failure is not a weakness. It's a way for you to go to the road of success. You need to feel and find failure before going to success. I heard that quote somewhere but I can't remember at all. But that is true. The pain also. I know what's the pain of failure. But all of us have that right?

Continue to write some beautiful poems! I love it so much!

Keep writing!

That's all

-ILoveBooks123

I'm here to say I loved this. I can't relate to the athlete part but I sort of can because I push myself waaaaay to hard when I'm writing or doing excessively hard math for my age. I still think three hours is a lot. *waits for middle school*

However the last line is getting a little redundant by the end. I know that's kind of the point but I think the end should always hold a nice surprise, or just something shocking. It doesn't have to be gib, just a change of a few words. I'm not saying you have to do this, I'm just saying me as a reader got a little bit bored at the end. But this was awesome! Happy writing and cheers for Team Wizards!

-wisegirl22

Hey Bball41! CaptainSalty here to review!

Being a runner, I can relate to this. I really love it! It speaks truth in so many ways. It flows very well. By making it not rhyme, it sounded better and it simplified it so much. Of course that's a good thing. I really enjoy the repetition in each stanza. I also enjoyed this poem because you don't see a lot of poetry like this anymore, as CelticThunder1438 said. It's very optimistic and can definitely make someone realize what an athlete is.

I want to read more of your poems! I love this! Don't give up and always write, Bball41!

-CaptainSalty

As a runner, I can relate to this.

This perfectly conveys how I feel, and probably how all athletes feel, about failure, pain, work, and passion. Keep up the good work!

Hello there Bball41! Celtic Thunder's number one fan here to review some of your work! Or just Selina

I am not really an athlete do to a disease I have in my knees. My brother in law owns horses though, and I ride quite often so I can semi relate to this =) I loved the poem, you did a great job with it. Your poem flowed really well, and I liked it. You don't see to many of these types of poems anymore. Everything is just about depression, failure ect. This poem was about something you feel passionate about. Really good! *big thumbs up* I try to do that to which is why most of my poems are either about horses or Ireland =P Two things I feel passionate about. <3

I loved this part in your poem, it is my favorite -

"I know what passion is.
Passion is feeling an adrenaline rush.
Passion is creating opportunity.
Passion is playing with your heart."

Very very very well written *two big thumbs up* Your awesome! Keep writing!

~Selina