Smile

I love it! This poem did make me smile.......short, simple and heartwarming! It basically lists all the reasons we have to smile in the world.

There are a few errors, though. In the second stanza, the last line " Tomorrow is to far to away worry" is not right. You've used to wrong 'to". It should be "Tomorrow is TOO far away to worry". That's what you meant, didn't you?

So, I especially love the first stanza. It gives us the FUNDAMENTAL reasons to smile, that just because we're LIVING and BREATHING is a huge blessing.

Thanks for this poem!

Keep it up!

Mysticalxx

Hey Bball41!

I loved reading this piece! I love how happy it is, there is so much depressing and poignant poetry out there, that I think "Smile" is a very welcome addition!!

Apart from a few typos, this poem is perfect!;

"Tomorrow is to far away" -too far away not to

"Orginal" - original

Thank you for that sweet reminder, to "simply smile", and for making the literary world a sunnier place

Please keep writing,

-theb00kthi3f

Hey Bball41!

I really like your poem! Seriously its beautiful. The format is good, I like it. I rarely see this kind of format. But enough of that. Lets go to the poem itself...

First things first, I like how you actually show the true meaning of smile. For me that's the true meaning and that what we should feel when we smile. Every words I see is just so wonderful and really well describe. I gave 10 out of 10, of course. I rarely see this kind of simple but yet beautiful poem. So good job with that.

The rhyme is actually quite good I must say. That's all I want to say about that. I like most of the part especially the second stanza:

"Smile.

It's a new day.

Yesterday is history.

Tomorrow is to far to away worry."

I like how you tell your readers about this. It's so true! We should just smile and think that there's still a new day. Forget yesterday history and move on without anything to worry about. It's just like go with the flow thing in life.

But about the second stanza I notice something about that...

"Tomorrow is to far to away worry." It should be "Tomorrow is too far away to worry." I think it just like that. Sorry about telling you about this. I suck at finding some errors. And i just notice it by now. Anyway just ignore what I say here if it didn't help a lot. I totally get what this stanza saying but I think you have some grammar errors here. So yeah. Mine doesn't even make sense too

Anyway this poem is really interesting, well written and good and beautiful. Just continue how you write. I'm one of the people that likes your poems so much. I just can relate to it everytime I read them. So yeah. Keep up the good work and continue to write good and interesting poems.

That's all of now.

~ILoveBooks123

Hi Bball41!

I really like your poem and I couldn't help but review it! The structure's was probably my favourite part, it's so interesting. Each paragraph brought in a new point which I loved by the way and I think the repetition really adds to it. The only thing you might want to check is your spelling in this line: Tomorrow is to far to away worry, I got what it meant but grammatically it didn't make sense. Anyhow I thought your poem was really beautiful, original, radiant and bright (see what I did there?).

~weirdbookworm

Hi Bball41!

I really like your poem and I couldn't help but review it! The structure's was probably my favourite part, it's so interesting. Each paragraph brought in a new point which I loved by the way and I think the repetition really adds to it. The only thing you might want to check is your spelling in this line: Tomorrow is to far to away worry, I got what it meant but grammatically it didn't make sense. Anyhow I thought your poem was really beautiful, original, radiant and bright (see what I did there?).

~weirdbookworm