Hey high top! I'm here for the exchange! First of all might I say, you are a brilliant poetist! This is a really awesome piece of work and I am disappointed with the number of likes it does not have.
I really like the way to broke up the lines, it was in all the right places.
I have exactly one nitpick.
when you're guided
I think this "guided" here doesn't really fit with the flow of the remainder of the poem. I mean, this is a personal preference, but the narrator is relating to"you" and telling you that you are the problem, so what exactly is guiding you to be a problem?
That's all I've got! Keep poeting!!!!
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