ahhh your style is amazing, envy!! i love the wordplay with "incarnate / in carnations" and the sound of "awareness like arsenic", and the imagery of deer radiating life is very creative. i can't wait to read more of your poetry this napo!
So much tension and drama in your poetry envy - I was hanging on to every line. It's tense and spooky and anxiety-laden, without being gory or trite. Love the connection between the deer's back like a wishbone, and then how that image is brought in later again. Your poetry paints a picture all the way from start to finish. Love your style and looking forward to reading along this month!
you should know i am a time traveler & there is no season as achingly temporary as now
I really love this poem! It's like a warm hug of nostalgia, reminding me of those pure, carefree moments of childhood. (I miss those days- :,D) The imagery is so vivid, like the girl scraping dirt from under her nails, or praying over her handmade necklace.
Very well written, Envy! 100/100!! <3<3
You know, ଳjellyfishଳ can't swim or shine on their own, but once they absorb light from around them, they're able to shine for themselves! So maybe...I can, too! If I'm around you, maybe I'll be able to shine, too? -
that second poem of yours is so beautiful aaahhhh best thing i've read all day!!! you're going to go places with that talent of yours, please keep writing!
she/her————pro-life————Christian————climber of rocks, trees, and rooftops----reader of poetry, Antoine de Saint Exupery, Pam Munoz Ryan, and Anthony Doerr "She is too fond of books, and it has turned her brain." -Louisa May Alcott
Cant wait!
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