Please, Sir... Can I have some more reviews?

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Hey, there. Could you review this for me?

Thanks in advance!

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Hello agian Skins, this is the poem I'm entering into the YWS Literary journal, I really need to have a review on the puncuation and anything else thats needs to be fixed.
This is the link--> topic73956.html

Thanks very very very much!!

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Please? topic74964.html
My reality comes to a close as I once again realize that you don't love me, and even if I love you with my everything you will never care.





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Hi
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I would really like more people to look at my work. Taking the time to rewiew it would be a huge help.
Thank you.
P.S. if you could, I have more
In greek mythology, chaos was the formess void from which came night and day, the earth and sky, time and light, gods and beasts. In short, all things were born from chaos.

But the first born was love.




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Hello Skins :)
Could you pretty please review the first chapter to my novel.
Thank you! You will forever be awesome if you do.
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A hero isn’t defined by winning. Loads of heroes die in the effort. Most of them never get any recognition. No, a hero is just somebody who does the right thing when it would be far, far easier to do nothing.


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Okay! All are done except for Flower, nicchaos and SweetMoments.

I'll hopefully be able to get to yours soon. ^^
I didn't know what to put here so I put this.




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My 'lil short story:
viewtopic.php?t=73204
And my poem...:
viewtopic.php?t=75099
Thank youu ever so much :D Xx
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Hello Prose-Master.
I was wondering if you could please take a look at this, as I'm terrible at prose, and have no idea how this is. Even just a vague thought would be welcomed.
If you don't want to or anything, feel no obligation.
Thanks either way
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Hi, I PMed you about this one. It would be great if you could give it a read.
A general overview would be nice.

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic75976.html

Thanks,
Alex
Need reviews?
I'd be happy to give them.
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic76104.html




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Sniks. Here.
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Now review One Glance (Poem) --> viewtopic.php?t=76207
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Hey skinso,
Can you review this for me? I know its not great,good even, but I needed to get over writers block which I haven't, so I posted it anyway. I'm not good at poetry but stories wouldn't come to me so whatever.

Here

Tear it up and give me title suggestions.

Oh yeah. Please. and thank you. xD

That should do me?
OK cool. Thanks again.
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All done! ^^
I didn't know what to put here so I put this.




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Hi again :)

Can you please take a look at the rest of the chapter I sent you before? I'd really, really appreciate it. c:

topic76249.html

Thanks so much! ^^




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Hi Skins,
I really liked the review that you gave me for my first chapter. Could you review my second one?
thanks in advance!
-Alex

topic76316.html
Need reviews?
I'd be happy to give them.
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic76104.html




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Hey freak, can you review this thing for me here: post822116.html#p822116
Like, please? With like a freaky cherry on top? :3
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