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Did you like your own work or is that just a random fluke of the like button? My first impression of this work is that the print is small; almost ...

Nice poem. I like the metaphor. I'm just not sure the point where you break the lines makes complete sense in the first stanza and in the second stanza, you ...

Hey, Fallenangel!! This is an awesome poem and I like how passionate it is. There were just a few tiny things I noticed that could be changed to make the ...

I think you could work on it. Some of it doesn't sound that natural and people talk about weather in real life when they don't have anything else to say, ...

colapse has to ls, like this: collapse. And I'm not sure you spelled oppresor right either.warriors should be warrior's. it's should be its I think. I love this poem; it's ...

A few of the lines didn't flow as well as others and the rhyming scheme is a bit hodge-podge. I felt like it ended a bit suddenly, but other than ...

I really like this chapter. There's not much going on, but that's good because it gives us time to get to know the characters better. That being sad, I wish ...

I don't think claws can nip. "throught" in the last paragraph should be 'throat.' This has definitely got some action in it, and I like that. Good job with this ...

Oh, I like it a lot! PM me when you get the next chapter out. Just two quick things: 1. If it's possible to not switched from third-person to first-person ...

Oh, I like this bit. The scribbled mark is very intriguing, I can't wait to see where that's going. This chapter's definitely got potential to be as amazing as the ...

Oh, I love it! So romantic and beautiful; I feel like I just watched the most emotional parts of someone's life flash before my eyes. My only critic is the ...

Nice piece; but I have a few critics. There are a few too many adjectives at the beginning and you don't really give enough background information; why is she following ...

Woah! I was totally not expecting that last line. That definitely adds some suspense. Very abrupt; and I like that. I don't have as many critiques for this as I ...

Oh, this version is definitely a lot better. Brilliant. The one thing is, I liked the last time better when it was shorter. Other than that, it's a very good ...

This is a good poem, and I like the meaning behind it, but I think it could use some work on the flow and beat. Hope this helps, sorry it's ...