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Re: Prologue to 'Unknown Title'
Hey, Sokka! I had to. Overall, this came off as a strong dramatic action scene due to the focus, budding sense of character, and pacing, but suffers where the prose ...
Aug 28, 2016 -
Re: Men Activism > Feminism
BOY OH BOY DID YOU FIND A PET PEEVE. On the internet in general it's amazingly easy to find dumb people, and looking into topics like this makes it all ...
Aug 18, 2016 -
Re: Silence Is Good
Hello! Is English not your first language? I could not tell from your profile. The first thing that jumps out is the punctuation here. I suspect this is because the ...
Aug 18, 2016 -
Re: spaghetti straps
I need to preface this review with an apology. There is a conversation to be had around this poem around femininity and self-image, one which I will try to address, ...
Aug 16, 2016 -
Re: Blackish Brown or 'Chocolate'
Hello! To begin with, I am glad to have had the context that this is about a dead cat. Knowing this does not lessen the impact of the poem, but ...
Aug 16, 2016 -
Re: there's no crying in chemistry
Hello! In my opinion, this poem weaves together the chemistry motif with emotion to good effect. I really appreciate how almost every line here is making use of both themes ...
Aug 15, 2016 -
Re: Cabbage Pest
Hello! I had to review this as, in fact, I love cabbage moths. Not butterflies, the moths, which made the lines about moths being discarded like pests humorous. It is ...
Aug 15, 2016 -
Re: Call of the Wild
This work has a clear environmentalist message. The first two verses are composed of poetic language and the stereotypical image of the wolf. The imagery there is clear in what ...
Aug 13, 2016 -
Re: Top 100 Things We Say To Bae (written by seventh graders)
Warning to readers: do not read while drinking. I choked at the 'Shawn Mendes' one. The middle school flashbacks came fast and hard, in all its former glory. Ah, to ...
Aug 12, 2016 -
Re: The Woman of the Sea
Heya! Phew. Powerful topic. Then again, it's hard to do suicide and make it light. The themes you were aiming through did shine through. I didn't pick up on sexuality, ...
Aug 11, 2016 -
Re: The Silent Grasp
Hello! My first impression from reading that this must be a partner piece to a story that the author had written. Based on your other work, this appears to be ...
Aug 11, 2016 -
Re: Brink of the Apocalypse
Hey! I truly do like the underlying idea here. 'Monochrome' is a fun word to begin with, and using it as a running metaphor I think is a powerful visual ...
Aug 11, 2016 -
Re: What Even Bro
Hello! The first things I pick up from this are the narrator's (this reads like a personal piece, written out of frustration, so the narrator I must assume is you) ...
Aug 11, 2016 -
Re: Shakespearian
Hello hello! As a Shakespeare fan, the first thing I notice and enjoy is the running Romeo and Juliet allegory. I don't read any of it as literal (it's Juliet's ...
Aug 9, 2016 -
Re: Something like Haiku- 1
Based on the debate below, I should like to begin with a small lesson on the haiku. The poem structure of the haiku is complicated by the fact that Japanese ...
Aug 8, 2016
