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  • Poetry » Narrative, Other Re: The Fabric of Me

    The poem jumps from one picture to another. One moment you are talking about something and then you shift onto something else. Is that a bad thing? Not really, I ...

    May 14, 2013
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Black and Blue

    okay I think the only problem I have is with the second stanza. The lines make it a bit odd to read, the last two lines specifically. I adore the ...

    May 14, 2013
  • Poetry » Realistic, Culture Re: The White Tree

    I dare reviewers to find the rhyme scheme of the poem. While it's not necessary to have a rhyme scheme, it sometimes makes up for a tough time reading when ...

    May 14, 2013
  • Poetry » General, Lyrical Re: Generation, Generation

    Nice one. This is what a poem should be like, it's got something about it. One slight problem, the last two lines of the second stanza sound a bit odd, ...

    May 14, 2013
  • Poetry » Romantic, Teen Fiction Re: Teenage Love

    This is short, this is somewhat repetitive, and this is not at all complex. While it's not necessary to crowd your poems with words and imagery, I think this poem ...

    May 13, 2013
  • Poetry » Realistic, General Re: "Come home.." (Rewritten)

    This poem has a certain calmness about it, a certain degree of quietness. Are you sure about the word 'essense'? Isn't it supposed to be 'essence'? Pardon me if I ...

    May 13, 2013
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Horror Re: Drinking Goodbye

    How moving! It has some really strong emotions flowing through it. It's officially the best suicide poem I've happened to read and honestly speaking I haven't read much. But this ...

    May 13, 2013
  • Poetry » Other, Review Re: The Brave One

    What's up with all the short poems :P You do realize how hard you guys make the job for reviewers by posting these kind of poems, don't you ? :D ...

    May 13, 2013
  • Poetry » Romantic, Review Re: choices

    This just leaves me wanting more. It's beautifully simple, hauntingly cute. Why didn't you add more to it :P I totally understand it's your choice and being lengthy doesn't mean ...

    May 13, 2013
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Romantic Re: Delusion

    Don't you think you'd have been better off putting these in stanzas? I mean I can see the rhyming going on so why not? There is minor punctuation problem in ...

    May 13, 2013
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Realistic Re: Tick Tock

    What a great line to start with "ends wait from the beginning of days" That's just genius. I do not see any problem with you work content wise at all. ...

    May 12, 2013
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: six words poem

    how exactly does one put a poem in six words?! That is something beyond me. But I understand what you wrote above was a strong feeling that you have somewhere ...

    May 12, 2013
  • Short Story » Dramatic, General Re: Senseless Words (Senseless World)

    Why would you call this a senseless story? It made quite some sense to me. It's quiet, I'll give you that and a bit different but certainly not senseless. I ...

    May 12, 2013
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Almost

    It's a unique idea, isn't it? You're comparing a candle with something or someone who is ignored, yet you mentioned that the bed and stairs are admired. Anyway, I like ...

    May 12, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Deleted

    How about a bit of punctuation friend? :P Anyway apart from that I felt some words sentences were twisted in structure just to keep up the rhyming. People often end ...

    May 11, 2013


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