Hey there!
I concur with the previous reviewers when they say that this was cute; it was a rather feel-good poem and it's always nice to read one of those. I'm not sold on the opening line however, though; it doesn't strongly pull your audience in and make them want to keep reading the poem, dear, and the first line of your poem should be intriguing enough to do just that.
Similarly, the middle line, She thought and thought till she knew who she was. feels like it could be delivered better; I like it for its simplistic style but at the same time it seems to change the pace of the poem and consume a rather significant amount of space without contributing much of an idea to the poem; instead it could be changed, perhaps nixed altogether, revised to be she pondered and decided or something along that path.
Hope my feedback helped a little,
June
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