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I liked the storyline of the poem...a lot. It was intriguing. The poem had a nice flow, and little grammatical errors, so I'm quite pleased with that. It was long ...

It seems like it has the chance to be a truly gripping story, if you develop it further. As prologues go, it was rather short, which in some cases is ...

Well, although I could not personally relate to the poem, I liked it. The flow was a little choppier, but as a whole, it was very well done. I particularly ...

I liked it--a lot. The main character was an interesting, enchanting individual, and I adored her. However, you used the mere word of 'she' a lot. 10+ times (18, exactly). ...

I enjoyed your beginning paragraph--it was very interesting, and I was hooked instantly. There were minor grammatical errors, and you switched between past tense and present tense, but as a ...

Well, I haven't found any spelling and/or grammatical errors as of yet, so kudos to you on that one, love~ overall, I really liked the story, and a personally found ...

I really liked it. It somewhat reminded me of a story I wrote recently, except this is a poem version of it. It's really cool, and it flowed well. Plus, ...

Poems ARE usually spaced. However, in this case, I kind of like the way it is now. I think, in some way, it fit with the peace. Either way, I ...

That would have scared me--QUITE a bit. It was very well written, and I have yet to see any grammar mistakes, so kudos to you on that, love. I really ...

There are a lot of twists and turns this story could take from here on out. I really like what you did with it, particularly the opening, which I found ...

I really like the way you went about discribing this. The rhythm was consistant until verse five, which was where the dream fell apart, which was beautiful in itself. As ...

That was beautiful. Really, I found it well written, and the rhythm was consistant throughout the piece. I think there are lots of people who can relate to this, be ...

D'awwww. It's adorable, and beautifully written. The lines flowed really well together, and for an area you don't find yourself particularly special in, it was very well done! I really ...

It was short, but sometimes, short is good. And in this situation, I believe short is good. ^_^ It seems like a gripping tale, and I'm excited to read more! ...

This song is adorable. Truly. The words really work together, and I've been having fun imagining random tunes to go along with it (being the music fanatic that I am). ...