demib

Huh the different colors and fonts messed me up. Errors i found. 1. NONE!!! iffy's i found. 1. next time dont do the wacky colors and fonts please. 2. has ...

Errors i found. 1."we're looking eyes?" Maybe explain what eyes. Iffy's i have found 1. it doesnt seem like you put much effort into this piece 2. it seems you ...

Love it. Errors that i have found are listed below. 1.NONE!!! Iffy's that i have found. 1. Maybe at every little coma make a new stanza, i think its called? ...

Few errors i found that i am going to list out for you. 1.Want not wqant. 2.Want not wnat. 3.How bout "I want to explore" other than what you said ...

So couple errors liste down below. 1. Interfere not enterfere. 2. Comfy not comfty (so I think) 3. Too instead of to. Other than that, it has good rhyme, good ...

You know this would be an amazing screamer song if you liked heavy metal.

So one of the lines in your poem doesnt quite make sense to me. 'The curse is hard to break, (Okay nothing wrong) Mysterious as the darkness inside your heart, ...

one complaint my dear i would love it if after every character spoke you would put it in a new paragraph like so down below "Hey Mom, Dad Jim" (New ...

alright so i have a few complaints. One in this story where did the knife come from that stabbed Helen? There was no mention of the mob was men until ...

Ohhh i love this one. I love how the questions flow from one another, kind of like they were answering the questions and then asked one of their own.. Chain ...

i like them. Never been a big fan og Hiaku's but i like the way these ones flow all together. they string themselves like a rope. Over all all three ...

You know now that I am thinking about it, if you were good at writing poems this would be a very nice poem. Although your essay has good flow to ...

This is good its makes me wonder about what your asking. I have no objections about your peom. Keep writing from soul heart and mind

The emotion is good in this poem. Story peoms are very good when it has full blown emotion your whole set of mind is put into your words. Its not ...

Ummm a couple things to note my dear. One you need to fix your grammar. It is kind of all over the place. Two you need to fix your spelling ...