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Wow, that is a very hateful poem. i get the feeling you were in a bad mood when you wrote this and it seems very agressive. "words splattered across the page; words splattered across your head." was my favourite line in the poem and it gave an image of words just sprayed on a page and some random persons face. "I've got nothing left to say but reason" is a very powerful line. I makes it seem as if you are a victim and that there is no hope in arguing. All in all, I think it was pretty good, but not your best ever. Kepp going and remember, Writers are made, not born.
i think this is a really (not in an offensive way) different...
but i don't like the fronts
Also i don't understand what you are talking about
It sounds like your talking about cutting your self with the line and the red talk.
But it also sounds like your talking about getting hurt...
So it kind of left me at a what the heck?! O_o moment
Huh the different colors and fonts messed me up.
Errors i found.
1. NONE!!!
iffy's i found.
1. next time dont do the wacky colors and fonts please.
2. has okay feeling.
3.i dont quite get what your trying to say.
4. has a lot of almost angry bruises on it. it is like your poem is talking about bruises you know? Black, blue red? couldnt care more or less?
Goods i found.
1.has a lead, maybe a few tweekers and it will be good.
Other than those nitpickiers its good.
Keep writing! Hawinay