aVeryThoughtfulBeing

I think the best thing about this poem besides the skilled use of words and good poetic quality and imagery, is the last 2 lines. I think these are more ...

This was beautiful and I see nothing wrong with it. A neat thing about the perspective is that someone can read it and take from it as the person that ...

I thought you had brilliant use of details and imagery to convey the scene, it wasn't just the conversation, it was the scene in it's entirety and was depicted very ...

I like the simple yet impacting metaphors in this poem. Metaphor of sand, of last seeds, of a thread, of trash, of a ghost, of crushed pieces, of a gambler, ...

This has good use of a variety of words and speaks about the subject well. Just some grammatical errors, characterisation should be characterization and "Being what i not seem to ...

I'm very interested in this character, and elaboration on him and whatever story you have to tell. The idea of whats really reality and fantasy can be scary and thought ...

The first 2 stanzas I really liked, it seemed like you were talking about something that had actually happened to me when I was a little younger, a drastic change ...

Throughout the story you used "women" which is plural, when it is singular so should be "woman." I like the attention payed to the woman's green eyes and scar, it ...

Just some corrections: "...a place WE'RE/WE ARE not sure of";"It can throw us OFF course" Just some of those good ol' annoying mistakes everyone makes. I like what you've had ...

There were a few times where use of words sounded a bit confusing, like the 2nd and 4th line, but it generally made sense and seemed apparent that it was ...

This was gorgeous, I loved it. It has so much use of words and you rhymed brilliantly well. Great imagery of sight, feeling, and of experience. You spoke of many ...

Great work on this one too. It as this deep mood for writing yet at the same time use of words has a childlike joy to it. A problem I ...

Great, pretty poem, and it really captures and describes the indeed odd and sublime aura of winter. Twice you say "Silver like is frosted leaves" but the second says "Silver ...

"With my cigarettes I left another love" that is a cool line and choice of words, and it and a good deal of this poem make me imagine some punk ...

I agree with Lindsay in that this poem is original. Specifically, I thought the pen metaphor to be very interesting, unique, and quaint, and I liked it. And also wonder ...