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September 23, 2012
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Deepest of me

Deepest of me

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You know that moment after watching an epic love story full of enthusiasm and greatness? Yeah, that moment when your heart wishes for a lil' more than it has and you feel fully blossomed and full of hope. That's the moment when we are growing into star gazing dummies with wishes, hopes and dreams-while gathering our selves and heading for a new experience.

These are the moments that we need to learn to cherish and hold onto because these are the moments that are going to help us get through the hard times.

We all experience moments of hardship and moments of happiness but sometimes one specific moment can put us in a place we not sure off. It can throw us of course and send us flying with the birds or flyng into a bottomless pit of disasters. We need to understand how to change the bad times into good ones and we need to learn to move forward...

Just a word of Inspiration..**

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MaxZero1496

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MaxZero1496 wrote a review · Wed Oct 17, 2012 12:47 am

Awesome!
Really good. Just a few mistakes I caught..flying into a bottomless pit, flying is lacking the "i". And second, in the first paragraph, ourselves has a space after our. Beyond that, you have a way with words, and the font looks like a journal entry, really helped bring out the emotion. Only one suggestion: Could you make the second paragraph a bit longer to balance out the essay? Great job!

aVeryThoughtfulBeing

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aVeryThoughtfulBeing wrote a review · Tue Sep 25, 2012 4:44 am

Just some corrections: "...a place WE'RE/WE ARE not sure of";"It can throw us OFF course"
Just some of those good ol' annoying mistakes everyone makes.

I like what you've had to say, speaking of moments, I like that sort of introspection into what makes some life and experience. Even better, you did so positively, focusing on good moments, but acknowledging the bad ones. Words of inspiration for hard times, that the good ones are what are to make those easier. A simple truth revealed, and said well.

Yasi17

Yasi17 replied · Tue Sep 25, 2012 9:54 pm

Thank you for your review. Helpful and very honorable :p
I hope my piece was of good use xoxo

WelcomingException

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WelcomingException wrote a review · Mon Sep 24, 2012 4:12 am

"when your heart wishes for a lil'(punctuation) more"

"blossomed and full of hope..(put a space here)"

"dummies with wishes, hopes and dreams,(turn this (,) into a period)

"These are the moments that we need to learn to cherish and hold onto because these are the moments that are going to help us get through the hard times." (beautifully said :3)

Beautiful inspirational note. Not much of an essay par say, but still nice. Check your punctuation. Other then that beautiful. Keep up the good work!