SiriusBlack

"Someday I’ll walk away from you.   ()I’ll walk so far {Mabey this is on purpose or a mistake but I think that you dont need the space before I'll.} ...

"Everyone has one or two secrets, all the rest have been said and told. I have over a million untold secrets, trapped inside me forever. All my feelings, (and) all ...

"It is behind closed doors that even the happiest familes break down into tears and fall in dark voids of haunting pasts and present mistakes. {I like this Stanza. It ...

"Cool,() nice Never too hot(,) () Nor ever too cold(.) () Laughing outside(,) () Running the block(,) () Leaves blowing(i)n the breeze(,) () Pretend ther snowflakes() Falling on me() See ...

"Do you see?() Against the wall,() A shadow shaped as she.() She...() who is me.() Me,() the she no one sees." This is really interesting! I like the me she ...

"When something has always been the case,  It just needs realising. When it's there staring you in the face, It needs embracing. But clutching,(Since this is a poem after a ...

Hi guys! This is a song I wrote a little while ago, please tell me what you think :D() Verse 1: If I had been somewhat supportive would that have ...

So this is poetry, so I wouldn't have it be a paragraph. "How do you confess to loving someone?() Lies that never should have been told already have been released ...

"Gotta catch 'em, Get dem now. Don wait no (n)o, Hurreh(I don't get this word do you mean hurrah?) please, Dem alligatahs' fas and quick. Aligatah huntin' Be a tough ...

"The birds sing in the morning(,) to thank the sun(,) for another day of life(,)                some think. While others more knowledgeable(,) about such things(,)            

You forgot the comma or period after it. "Where flowers grow" Also after a period I would add a new paragraph. That way it isn't a run along poem. It ...

I like the first verse but after that the rhythm got off in a few places. I understand the meaning of this and it is very powerful. Good work but ...

This is very good. I like the rhythm but (this may be just me) but after a sentence I dot his "And if my eyes don’t open, Meet me by ...

This is a great poem but the one thing I didn't like about it is maturity and tea don't rhyme in the way I would have liked them to. You ...