Spring

Hello Writ! I'll be reviewing this for you.

I really like the message you gave out in this, and I think this has lots of positive potential.

There's not much to say about this...but lets try to point out some of the obvious things you could've changed or made better.

Periods! Try to keep them in sentences or stanzas, maybe break them up as followed:

Cool, nice,
Never too hot Nor ever too cold,
Laughing outside,
Running the block,
Leaves blowing In the breeze,
Pretend ther snowflakes Falling on me,
See me?
I'm the one Running and Laughing,
Enjoying a Good thing.

"Cool,()
nice Never too hot(,) ()
Nor ever too cold(.) ()
Laughing outside(,) ()
Running the block(,) ()
Leaves blowing(i)n the breeze(,) ()
Pretend ther snowflakes()
Falling on me()
See me?() {I dont get this part. You said me a little to much so it sounds a little repetitious. I personally think this line can get scraped.}
I'm the one()
Running and()
Laughing(,) ()
Enjoying a()
Good thing(.)"
I like all the description but this a poem, not a paragraph. Also I just made the suggestion to indent after every capitalized letter. If you dont want to indent so much I would lower case a few words. Other than that your description was excelent and I really could picture Spring. Good work!

Hey Rit!

I see you're fairly new here, so welcome! If you need any help, or have any questions, feel free to PM me. I'm not an expert on here yet, but I fancy myself fairly good at navigating it, so I'd be happy to help you, if ever the need should arise.

Anyway, for your review:

I tend to give bad advice on poetry, especially when I comment on meter and pace, so I'll try to avoid that topic altogether. I think that this is a really pretty poem, and I liked it alot- but you might try seperating it into distinct stanzas, so it's an easier read. I see you capitalize particular words, so I'm assuming it was in stanzas- YWS can mess with your spacing, I know, so I'll leave it at: you might want to play around with that.

Keep writing!

~Shady