LilPWilly

Wow. I know I say that a lot, but I love how human this is, and how relatively light hearted it is for this site. Instinctively counting the graves is ...

Disconnected, repetitive, and emotion-centric lines, definitely a late night brain barf! I’m curious if these metaphors are more than just pretty pictures. Taking every line as a separate thought, t

Dang I thought this was going to be helpful loll Time to kick you out the green room. You led me on and maintained the tone perfectly. By the time ...

This is so raw and realistic. I know what it’s like to lose who you love most, and to want to die. Every line in here is so relatable. The ...

A few things This is too coherent to be Douglas Adams lol. Also, is Halfrunt a planet destroyer or sympathetic to ice cubes and piipsqueaks? I see what you did ...

Dang oof This is beautiful. The title is good enough, but the poem, I might have to post on my wall (irl that is) Idk I want review points so ...

I don’t know which parts of this are metaphors. This is heartbreaking. I can’t imagine the horrible things that you have experienced. And by that I mean that imagining it ...

Wow the rich imagery is so real it’s refreshing. Who do you take inspiration from? I think, if you mean this to be jarring, the broken phrases definitely help, but ...

This is such a lonely poem. The carcass of happiness was the most emotional part for me, as I know the feeling all too well of hopelessness, with the wish ...

This is phenomenal. I love the empathetic view of outcasts—it’s inspiring. I hope you continue developing this idea. The only input I have is that people think in many different ...

Hahahaha I love everything I’ve read from you. It’s good to have an active comedian on site. Have you read Shel Silverstein's poems? This reminds me of them. The only ...

Hey, me gusta mucho. To help the flow, you could try out a few things. Changing the ‘that’ after ‘prison’ to ‘and’. Changing the ‘rotten’ line to ‘I guess we ...

What a poignant predecessor to Stuck in the Past. This is such good writing. I especially liked: How crushed my soul is, how cold my heart is, how fragile I ...

My favorite lines: Time passes slowly here The fading memory [of] a path blindly followed, to meet the present face to face I have finally not been left out of ...

Dang. This slaps. The visual poetry is so vivid. I can taste the honey and almond milk, and picture the beautiful angel with the cursive voice and caring hands. Somehow ...