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LemonyIce

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  • Poetry » Romantic, Teen Fiction Re: beauty: the boy and the girl

    Hey there! Okay, so first of all I did enjoy this poem. However, a few things. This feels a lot like a story that's been sort of forcefully converted into ...

    Aug 2, 2015
  • Poetry » Romantic, Dramatic Re: Don't Leave Me

    Hey there, AwesomeSauce! ^^ So, first thing I'm going to say here is that your poem has a lot of potential. But, you really need to work on it more. ...

    Jan 30, 2013
  • Short Story » Science Fiction, Action / Adventure Re: Super group!

    Hey Mvb! I'll be your reviewer for today~ First off, I had a slight problem with the spacing. When I first opened this, it just looked like one huge block ...

    Dec 30, 2012
  • Short Story » Horror, General Re: Al's Meat Shoppe

    Hey Nina! So first off, this didn't really horrify me as much as I would have expected. Your overall plot was horrifying yes, but the way you wrote it wasn't. ...

    Sep 6, 2012
  • Poetry » Realistic, General Re: Cowboys

    Hey Shadow! Lemony here, just returning the favour. ;) I like the rhyme scheme in this piece. It's quite suitable, and although I don't really like rhyming a lot, you ...

    Jul 24, 2012
  • Poetry » Other, Dramatic Re: What am I suppose to DO ?

    Hey Jolene! First off, it might have been a mistake, but I think you need to remove the bullet points. Poems don't need bullet points, and it just makes it ...

    Jul 22, 2012
  • Poetry » General, General Re: I'm out of time.

    Hey ML~ Firstly Oh my my. I'm out of time. This reminded me of the White Rabbit from Alice in Wonderland. xD Anyway, on to my review~ Your beginning ticked ...

    Jun 24, 2012
  • Lyrics » Dramatic, Realistic Re: Sally

    Hi MikStar! This was really good! I could actually imagine Sally and everything you've written about her. But I just had a small problem with the beginning. There are only ...

    May 24, 2012
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Genetic Makeup (1/10)

    RaspBerry~ I finally got a chance to review this~ I thought this poem was a little short. Short's fine; short's good. But I had a feeling you could've written a ...

    Feb 1, 2012
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Life

    Hey Aly! Well, if you needed to have a rhyme scheme, it's fine. I think you could work on the punctuation, though. Sometimes punctuation matters a lot, because the reader ...

    Jan 28, 2012
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Stars

    Hey tgirly! Oooooh. I liked the setting of this poem. It was different, and better that way. A little unusual, but I liked it. Though I had a little trouble ...

    Jan 22, 2012
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Broken Hearts

    Hey Aliyah! Your poem was short and sweet, but I honestly thought there was a lot more you could have written. For example, try writing a little more about how ...

    Jan 20, 2012
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Template

    Hey Adam. I'm here as requested, and like I already told you, this probably won't be very helpful. I have a suggestion, but that's really minor, so just ignore it, ...

    Jan 18, 2012
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: The Silent Dancer

    Hi Izzy! Beautiful. That's what this poem was. It was so beautiful and I loved reading it. It made me imagine something like an empty auditorium with a girl dancing ...

    Jan 9, 2012
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: you are my sheltter

    Hey aseel! Your poem was really meaningful and beautiful. It was a good read, but you had a lot of spelling mistakes and the punctuation wasn't used at some places ...

    Jan 5, 2012


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