Kaylyn

Just a few things: I think the repetition at the beginning is a bit much. That is that it is repeated too many times within such a short span, especially ...

Wish I could hear the beats or hear the notes. The content though is fantastic and so very relatable. I didn't stumble across any grammatical mistakes. Also your imagery with ...

Just a few things to work on: Content: I found just a few lines didn't quite make sense. "Other than my heart Which bleeds faster each day, Oh, how I ...

Acquantances, they hardly guessed The future they would know. How would tey? They were only strangers Should be they Not so long ago. Poking, teasing, easy laughter, And yet the ...

Alright, just a few things: Grammar: I think its been pointed out, but cradle should be cradled in the first stanza, second line. Also, not sure if the - at ...

Just a few things: Imagery: Bravo! I love the imagery you used here throughout the poem with the fire. The first stanza was excellent, however, the imagery started to fade ...

So I will do a line by line review for you. Here it goes: I knew I was in trouble when we kissed. It has been so long Change it ...

Just a few things: Structure/Form: It looks as if you formatted this to go into stanzas, but there was a posting mistake. None-the-less, here is a suggested format and a ...

Alright just a few things: Structure/Form: I don't know if there was a posting error, however, since this is a poem, it needs some form of structure. Also, I'll add ...

Alright some things to consider: Grammar: Have noticed in the second paragraph needs a space in between them. It appears to be a simple typo. Also no need to bold ...

Ok. I didn't find any grammatical mistakes in your work. However, I did notice the abundance of "filler" words littered throughout. An example of this: "I just sat there in ...

Just some things to keep in mind: Grammar: "It's a whrilpool of emotions" Whirlwind "It's a storm of confuion" Confusion "I worry they might seap" Seep Also, the parenthesis around ...

Just a few things: Grammar: "You have an unrealistic sense of optmisim" It's spelled optimism. "Everyone thinks you wrong," Should be your. Flow: So you had a pretty steady ryhme ...

O.K. Just a few things: Grammar: "Truly, the eye could quite possibaly be the gateway to the soul." Should be possibly. Rythym: This poem has potential, however, you are using ...

Just a few things: Grammar: When you ask Why, its generally a question. Change the period to a question mark. Rhyme/Rhythm: Other have pointed it out, so I won't harp ...