Hello Xorx, I am here to do you a review for you, by the way this is for review day on the red teams side.
I sure hope that this helps you out buddy.
How can you savage rain? I do not know what this is about.
Okay there is something that a lot of people do I do not think it is a very good idea you are personalizing you are saying YOU it does not make the reader want to read more of your work You say You are so mean bla bla bla and people don't like that at least I don't really like it when people do that don't do it its not a good idea.
I do not think you can sing S.O.S S ooooooooooooo SSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS see you can't sing that.
Why are you digging holes?
Good job here I hope the review helps.
Sorry if I hath review badly sorry if I had.
Keep writing and good luck.
~Jon~
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