Jalmoc

Hey there! This was a really interesting piece. Your descriptions were really good and sentence structure was solid. For your first post on here, you're making some serious waves. I ...

Hi there! This was a really bone chilling piece. Your word structure and fluency was really well! I don't see any grammatical errors so good job! You were able to ...

Hi there! I'm going to give you a quick review! First off, organization is very important! Make sure you space out your piece in paragraphs. Most people will be leery ...

I think almost everyone else has really caught anything worth catching. I honestly really loved this piece though. It was fresh. A brand new idea and look on things. I ...

Awww, that was really sweet. :) I love it. I don't see any mistakes (I hope there wouldn't be any for something so short), so good job! :D Sorry that ...

Wow. That was pretty dark. I love it though. :) As far as I could see, there weren't any mistakes. I thought that you structured this really well. I don't ...

I really loved this. :) I think that you put this together really well. So I was going to review, but I'm not a big poetry expert. From what I ...

I loved this! :) It was very short as others said, but short isn't always bad! I'd like some descriptive details of the main character though. I feel like I ...

Hi there! :D I was rummaging through the forums and found your piece! I'm just going to give a few quick things. :) First off, your main character does a ...

Wow. That was really good. One thing I noticed (at least to me it did this) was in the sixth line. "and now, the girl." I feel like it kinda ...

I thought this was really good. :) The only thing I really noticed out of place was the "and pop" at the end. I'm not a big reviewer for Poetry, ...

That was really good! You kept my attention the entire time, and there was lots of feeling in it! There weren't any mistakes that I could tell, so a plus ...

Very well done!! I love the turmoil that you put him through! I feel the same way Judy, what happened to the Rebel Alliance? Did they just disappear? If they ...

That was really good! :D I'm a hardcore Star Wars fan, so this was rather refreshing! I think that Luke should have killed Vader though. But that's just my opinion! ...

Wow! For being so short, that packed a lot of emotion and story into it!! I loved it! I don't exactly know how to review lyrics. Lol. So I'm just ...