ImHero

Bewitched she glanced, a titan among mortals he stood; Flustered she connived, his essence she sought; Enticing - enthralling with her venomous femininity; Into her realm, a world of shadows, ...

The Lord is my Shepard, Already uninterested. I believe I heard this phrase already, I hear it everytime someone is babbling about religion. Way to go you started with one ...

He thinks you’re beautiful. At least he says he does. He says you are. He keeps on saying it. You don’t believe it. He keeps on saying it. At this ...

Each night I am awoken by a sound, The silent shade is disturbed by a noise. It is a short and sharp piercing sound, It echoes around my room as ...

“Mind your own business,” muttered Emmaas (as) she watched Stacie flip her hair in the air and walk away. ^Emmaas? This should be Emma and you need as in here ...

Wow, everything but the end just seemed flawless. That end though, last two lines ruined it for me. See you talk about one thing the whole time, well different things ...

They have fragmented my soul.' Okay this line right here^, it could be sooooo much better. I understood. How could I not After the terror she had witnessed? And she ...

What is this? "Smoke rising Water falling Flames that won’t die out Look into my eyes What do you see? Anger Despare Sadness Depression Darkness Death" I don't see any ...

Hero here, Okay so, i don't really like this. Its because you explain the thoughts of the story but don't tell it. There is no imagry or anything that actually ...

Uhm.. I think you want to sell this with its formatting. It just makes it look random, and I also think at the end of the poem was random. To ...

Okay so I just ask myself what when I read this: Every load that falls upon you; again..? slower capability This is just random words put together to me.. Everything ...

Hey persy! This poem is amazing- better then anything I have ever wrote but-- I think you should re-read this and decide again if it was written how you intended. ...

Hmmmmm... I do like your word choice but I kinda think your word choice was made for the poem, if that makes sense. If you tried to tell me a ...

Hello hero here, You seem to force us to believe what the other person is feeling by telling us without any evidence. I don't want to be told what happened ...

I like this. I think it can do without some fluff though. The 2nd stanza seems corny-sorry. Not to mention you say "of from" which is most certainly an error. ...