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Re: Romeo v. Juliet
Hello! Can I just say that I wish I could write humor and I would be lying if I said I wasn't jealous of how amazing this is? I'll say ...
Aug 14, 2015 -
Re: What 'Home' Has Taught Me
Hello! CardinalSouth here :) This poem is so sweet! There's just a few things I would fix but nothing major :) - 'Snares shrill confident and pipes blow loud' Snares ...
Aug 14, 2015 -
Re: I Will Stand
Hello! I love this poem! One of my biggest goals as a writer/poet is to create something that really speaks to someone... I don't want someone to just read my ...
Aug 14, 2015 -
Re: 1- Write the definition of your favorite word, according to you
Welcome to the website! I hope you find everything you're looking for and more here- I think you'll find it's a great community! Expression is a beautiful topic to journal ...
Jul 4, 2015 -
Re: Denial
Hellooooo :D First of all, your descriptive details are spot on! I find it challenging to write action scenes without coming off too cliche, but here you've done a great ...
Apr 13, 2015 -
Re: and the dream comes true.....not
Hi! Here to review :-) First of all, I love your opening sentence. It's so hard to create a good, orginal opener that really grabs the readers attention, and if ...
Jan 13, 2015 -
Re: AnyBody Wants to Buy a Heart?
Hey there! This piece is very relatable and I love how you put this confused, broken feeling into actual words! Great job!!! I have a small question, however. Why do ...
Dec 12, 2014 -
Re: A Poem About An Essay About Myself
Hello! Here for a review :) This is great! I love your imagination on this, and I know exactly what you are talking about when you're struggling to try to ...
Nov 10, 2014 -
Re: Making The Most of Teenage
This is so true! I can absolutely relate to this. Can we just have every teenager in the world read it? Please? Yes, no? Little nitpick... instead of "doing badly ...
Nov 8, 2014 -
Re: The System: 2
Hello! Here for a review :) I'll just review as I read, if it's all the same to you! The System.... You keep saying that, just as you did in ...
Nov 8, 2014 -
Re: The Truth Behind Cartoons
Hi there! I will review your piece today :) "Now have you every known how in all cartoons that I've seen so far have had parents that were just terrible. ...
Nov 8, 2014 -
Re: Celebrate Mothers, Celebrate Life.
Hello!!! I'll attempt a review... a challenge indeed. This is flawless!!! This story is actually the first that I've heard from the child's point of view! You always hear rants ...
Oct 24, 2014 -
Re: Utopia
Start: about 5pm Welcome to YWS! Boy, this is long! I will review it as I read for time's sake lol :) Your opening....wow. Just the first two sentences grab ...
Oct 21, 2014 -
Re: Sweater Weather
Hello! This is a great poem! You chose the perfect words to give the reader chills, and I have to admit I shivered after I read it. Usually, I hate ...
Oct 20, 2014 -
Re: I want to _____
I feel like I really relate to this for the fact that I want to touch others with my writing. Right now, I'm still trying to figure out how to ...
Oct 20, 2014
