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CardinalSouth

CardinalSouth

  • Other » Satire, Humor Re: Romeo v. Juliet

    Hello! Can I just say that I wish I could write humor and I would be lying if I said I wasn't jealous of how amazing this is? I'll say ...

    Aug 14, 2015
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: What 'Home' Has Taught Me

    Hello! CardinalSouth here :) This poem is so sweet! There's just a few things I would fix but nothing major :) - 'Snares shrill confident and pipes blow loud' Snares ...

    Aug 14, 2015
  • Poetry » Realistic, Other Re: I Will Stand

    Hello! I love this poem! One of my biggest goals as a writer/poet is to create something that really speaks to someone... I don't want someone to just read my ...

    Aug 14, 2015
  • Art » General, General Re: 1- Write the definition of your favorite word, according to you

    Welcome to the website! I hope you find everything you're looking for and more here- I think you'll find it's a great community! Expression is a beautiful topic to journal ...

    Jul 4, 2015
  • Short Story » Horror, Mystery / Suspense Re: Denial

    Hellooooo :D First of all, your descriptive details are spot on! I find it challenging to write action scenes without coming off too cliche, but here you've done a great ...

    Apr 13, 2015
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: and the dream comes true.....not

    Hi! Here to review :-) First of all, I love your opening sentence. It's so hard to create a good, orginal opener that really grabs the readers attention, and if ...

    Jan 13, 2015
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Realistic Re: AnyBody Wants to Buy a Heart?

    Hey there! This piece is very relatable and I love how you put this confused, broken feeling into actual words! Great job!!! I have a small question, however. Why do ...

    Dec 12, 2014
  • Poetry » Humor, General Re: A Poem About An Essay About Myself

    Hello! Here for a review :) This is great! I love your imagination on this, and I know exactly what you are talking about when you're struggling to try to ...

    Nov 10, 2014
  • Article / Essay » Realistic, General Re: Making The Most of Teenage

    This is so true! I can absolutely relate to this. Can we just have every teenager in the world read it? Please? Yes, no? Little nitpick... instead of "doing badly ...

    Nov 8, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Dramatic, Science Fiction Re: The System: 2

    Hello! Here for a review :) I'll just review as I read, if it's all the same to you! The System.... You keep saying that, just as you did in ...

    Nov 8, 2014
  • Other » Narrative, General Re: The Truth Behind Cartoons

    Hi there! I will review your piece today :) "Now have you every known how in all cartoons that I've seen so far have had parents that were just terrible. ...

    Nov 8, 2014
  • Article / Essay » Spiritual, Culture Re: Celebrate Mothers, Celebrate Life.

    Hello!!! I'll attempt a review... a challenge indeed. This is flawless!!! This story is actually the first that I've heard from the child's point of view! You always hear rants ...

    Oct 24, 2014
  • Short Story » Science Fiction, Historical Fiction Re: Utopia

    Start: about 5pm Welcome to YWS! Boy, this is long! I will review it as I read for time's sake lol :) Your opening....wow. Just the first two sentences grab ...

    Oct 21, 2014
  • Poetry » Romantic, Romantic Re: Sweater Weather

    Hello! This is a great poem! You chose the perfect words to give the reader chills, and I have to admit I shivered after I read it. Usually, I hate ...

    Oct 20, 2014
  • Poetry » Spiritual, General Re: I want to _____

    I feel like I really relate to this for the fact that I want to touch others with my writing. Right now, I'm still trying to figure out how to ...

    Oct 20, 2014


Work expands to fill the time available for its completion.
— C. Northcote Parkinson