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Deanie! Can I just say that I really love that art piece? Edits and all? modifies place), (fighting free thoughts--> modifies previous phrase). This can be easily edited: In mysterious ...

WritingForHim! Now that I've got that out of my system.... I really appreciate the work you did here, there is a sense that much attention was paid in the rhythm ...

OrionRising! I think you can re-write the first two lines to: an arbitrary day is arbitrary, and you have the same idea in less words. The trouble with the way ...

Hey Collideascope! We've not met, welcome to YWS! :) Let me know if you have any questions about the site, or if you want to chat up this poem. I'm ...

Ancient! The rhythm and pacing here is wonderful. "Musculature" sort of opens up in your tongue, that was such a pleasant experience given the context of this poem :o There's ...

Hey Skydreamer, This poem. Wow. There is a lot of stuff that is happening in this poem. It's got a quality of rawness, I can tell that the subject is ...

Lums

Hey Rissymay and Nightflyer! Love the concept for this poem (if you can't already tell, I also love food :3) The way that the poem is laid out, we're sort ...

Hey Nightscape! I always have a helluva lot of fun with late night poetry sessions xD There's something serene about the am hours, so I can get really inspired, or ...

Hey Silver! There's some strong mood building in this, I like the content in respect to the title and the way tension was sort of drawn out - I think ...

Hey Writer! So I saw you needed some help with feeling/emotion, I'll try to share what I know and then if you want to chat this up later, just let ...

Hey Ancient! I like the idea of a volatile state. There's just something inherently poetic about it. For me the title refers to the essence of change and reactions, it's ...

Skor! xD It's funny in a dark humorish way. I never knew until now that the jamb was a technical term. I always assumed people say "door jam" like they'd ...

Ooooh my gosh, Fort! This is ridiculously cool! There are two motifs here. First one is that about a white winter light, the harsh glare of the sun, the inside ...

Hey eleutheromania! One thing that I would recommend for poetry in general (unless people know what they're doing) is to NOT capitalize the first word on each line. I know ...