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The Ladouceur Family Circus! (Reprise)

by vampricone6783


*This song is underneath my folder titled “The Town of Richardson”. There are no Gacha Club character designs for this one, but nevertheless, enjoy!*

INTRO:

“Don’t go in there! That place…it’s haunted!”

SONG:

Welcome to the Ladouceur family circus

It’s Hell on Earth

Once a place with joy, jokes, and laughter


Now an abandoned circus of sorrow and madness


There were people here, who once had a light

They shined like you and me, once upon a time

Now they’re haunting this carnival

Their ghosts linger in the dark


I’ll give you the first deaths as a start

Leona and Amelia, two splendid little girls

Rich in money and innocence

Got bullied by some kids and adults because of what they had

Some parents were jealous of theirs

Told their kids to bully them

It all looked bleak


Till the Ladouceur family circus!

Which brought them days of happiness!

Alas, this was not to be


For Mr. Lucas Ladouceur burned them alive

In their house they died

Their parents were the only ones who survived

Didn’t know their kids were there

Till the whole home collapsed and fell apart


Second death, we’ve got Mrs. Isabella Ladouceur

Ringmaster lady

The second in command

The matriarch, some might say

Oh, Isabella!

Her marriage with Lucas was a sweetened one!

She surely loved her son!


All should have gone well….

She noticed how hard dear Lucas worked…

Every night, he’d go to the circus to check it out, make sure everything was working…

The lights needed to shine…

The music needed to play

The signs needed to be clean

You know, that kind of thing

Even if it was dusk


So one evening, she took their son, William, to the circus,

So they could check it out

But they got a sinister surprise

Isabella got a stabbing from her precious and only love of her life


Third death, it’s William Ladouceur

Only thirteen years old

Only wanted to make his father proud

Just wanted to impress him


His mother took William with her

Because she knew he’d want to go

It was his chance for the big man

To smile at his own child


Not one stabbing, but two happened that night!

Now he’s a ghost with along with his mother


The fourth death is rather interesting

It’s about a clown

A clown known as Bubblegum

Yeah, nobody knows his real name

Only something about a dame

By the name of “Denise”


Not a record to be found

Not a single thing

He’s just there

Some say he’s got a stitched up mouth


But somehow he still speaks

How does that work?

Who is he, actually?

He’s unnerving and creepy, all the same!


Let’s talk about the fifth death

It’s so deserved

The one who dies

Is Lucas himself, the killer


Isabella pushed him in a deep pit in the forest

She thought she was getting closure

But now he’s a demon, out to hurt the living others!


The sixth death

Was a ten year old boy

Samuel Clarkson was his name

He got too close to the circus

At the wrong place, in the wrong time

He met the man himself


Well, you already know

He died in Lucas’ hands

Then he got cursed to go on as a demon


Lucas got a human form after

Now it’s easier to trick the humans

And poor Samuel, he really was oblivious


So will you join the souls?

At the Ladouceur family circus?

Will you come with them?


Welcome to the Ladouceur family circus

It’s Hell on Earth

Once a place with joy, jokes, and laughter


Now an abandoned circus of sorrow and madness


There were people here, who once had a light

They shined like you and me, once upon a time

Now they’re haunting this carnival

Their ghosts linger in the dark


Their ghosts linger in the dark...


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Tue Jun 25, 2024 5:32 am
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WeepingWisteria wrote a review...



Hey, Vampricone! I'm here to review this song of yours. I didn't realize you did songs, so I'm quite excited to check this one out!

This song feels like the opening to a grim musical, the opening numbers warning you that only horrors happen here. I love the grim vibes of it all. It's dramatic and spooky, and it tells all of the stories in a succinct way that is easy to follow and clearly illustrates the horror of each one. With that said, let's get into it!

There were people here, who once had a light
They shined like you and me, once upon a time
Now they’re haunting this carnival
Their ghosts linger in the dark

I would say that these are my favorite lines in this song. It shows a clear transition from happy people, most of them innocent children, to corrupted beings of malevolence. It's quite the heart-breaking stanza.

Third death, it’s William Ladouceur

The one thing I'm slightly confused about is why you chose to separate Isabella and William's deaths when they happened at the same time but you didn't separate Leona and Amelia. It feels a little imbalanced there.

Well, you already know
He died in Lucas’ hands
Then he got cursed to go on as a demon

Lucas got a human form after
Now it’s easier to trick the humans

This section confuses me too. Because you say that "he" died in Lucas' hands, which I'm assuming refers to Samuel. Unless that Lucas is meant to be Isabella and is referring to Lucas. So, does Samuel get cursed to be a demon, and because he's cursed, Lucas gets a human form? But then you go on to say that Samuel was oblivious. Oblivious to what? Lucas' human form? Because if Lucas got the human form from cursing Samuel, how did he get tricked? Or was that first Lucas meant to say, Isabella, Lucas got his human form through unrelated means, and Samuel fell for it? Sorry if that doesn't make sense. I'm just a bit lost.

Overall, this was quite a fun song! There are just a couple of parts that need some clarification or tweaking, and then it will be killer (pun intended). Thanks for publishing; as always, I enjoyed reading.

Happy Writing!
Wist




vampricone6783 says...


Leona and Amelia died at the same exact time. Though Isabella and William died on the same night, Isabella was stabbed before William, and they were both separated in the carnival.

Samuel did not know of Lucas%u2019 true nature until it was too late. He didn%u2019t even believe in the paranormal. As a demon, Lucas could come up as a dark shadow and take him.

So Samuel was cursed to be a demon by Lucas.

Glad you enjoyed!



WeepingWisteria says...


Ahh, I see! Thanks for the explanation <33



vampricone6783 says...


You%u2019re welcome! :>



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Hello there, my friend! Ellie back once again to review one of your fantastic literary works :D :D Let's get into the review for these lyrics!

“Don’t go in there! That place…it’s haunted!”


Oooh, perfect start to this! In my head, it is sort of like a spoken broadway like song, sort of like songs from the Addams family if that makes sense, because of the spookier vibes. Okay let's see what the rest of the song is about! It seems to be telling a story.

There were people here, who once had a light

They shined like you and me, once upon a time

Now they’re haunting this carnival

Their ghosts linger in the dark


I liked the light analogy you use her. You mention how they once had light, but now they linger in the dark, almost like this shadows that are only there to haunt. The light has all gone now, so now there is only darkness. I like the opposites you play with here. Nice work!

The fourth death is rather interesting

It’s about a clown

A clown known as Bubblegum

Yeah, nobody knows his real name

Only something about a dame

By the name of “Denise”


You do a wonderful job telling a story here. I like the name Bubblegum- it is oddly spooky and creepy sounding, since it belongs to this mysterious clown.

So will you join the souls?

At the Ladouceur family circus?

Will you come with them?


Ooooh!! And we get so many intriguing questions here :D I love this writing style. Great job.

Their ghosts linger in the dark...


And a fantastic ending here :) The spookiness and creepiness of the darkness is mentioned once again... ooooh!! Overall, I loved this piece!! Great work, my friend!

Your friend,
Ellie

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