*This song is from my “Town of Richardson” stories. You may check out the stories that connect to this underneath my folder titled “Town of Richardson”. Gacha Club character designs are on my wall. Enjoy!*
You should really know
That my friend loved you so
He called you “His dearest Denise”
I’d say “Why you’d love her?”
“You’re too young and she doesn’t love you back”
But he’d shrug it off and ignore my warnings
I tried to tell him the truth about you
I tried to point out all the red flags
The way you looked at him
The way you spoke to him
The way you whispered to your friends
The way you glanced at him
There is no way you ever actually loved him
None of it was real
Do you realize what you’ve done?
He’s sworn off his own name
He’s trying to bury his past
All because of you
Do you realize what you’ve done?
He’s broken and damaged and beaten and bruised
Because of you
A rotten, maggoty shell of what he once was
Something humorous and joyful turned to something dead and bloody
A decomposing mound
I’d follow you forever if I wasn’t worried about him more than you
I’d haunt you forever if that meant he wouldn’t be lonely
But I won’t
Because he needs me
He just doesn’t know it yet
Do you realize what you’ve done?
That he is nothing because of you
You stole his heart and his soul
Now, he’s just a cadaver who still dreams of his death
I hope you have an amazing life
I hope you have a beautiful life
I hope you have a happy life
I hope you enjoy your selfish life
I hope you enjoy your entitled life
I hope you enjoy your shallow life
Because at least you have one to live
He has no life
You greedily snatched it from him
Left him to die
He rots because of you
Do you realize what you’ve done?
I hate you more than I hate my father
You’re worst
Oh, one hundred times worst!
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OKAY sorry if this review turns out weird, I find I can relate right away, and when I relate, I end up chatting peoples ears off and review as I go.
First verse: I liked this right away. I guess italics can have that affect on you, though I would love to know the reason why you chose italics instead of regular text. I'm pretty sure I'm like that friend. I had someone I held precious, to. She kind of hated me for it. Maybe not hate, but definitely was wary. Although, she acted like she loved me sometimes. She certainly got mad when I gave up on her and went for someone else. I realized that she would never feel the same. And when I did go for someone else, she acts like I cheated. And then she left. Sometimes, people will do that to you. She realizes what she did, though. And she out casted me for it, just like Denise did to your friend. Maybe your friend will never heal, maybe they will never forget Denise. It's hard. It hurts. It's like it's hard to breath because it feels like your lungs are soaked and wet and you wont choke but it feels so E X H A U S T I N G to breath. I get it.
And you are kind of like my friend, Kayte. She loathes her. She told me I was like a depressed person who sounds like I came from an asylum, ever since the girl left me. But want to know what my friend did? She went after that son of a ***** and she was out for blood. It's okay to leave for a quick moment, to extract vengeance. I didn't want it. I just wanted to leave it be. But after I got it, I actually felt a lot better. Maybe your friend will kick and squirm to the idea of getting back at Denise. And maybe vengeance is more trouble than what it's worth. But if that's the case, then I would suggest having as close of a bond as possible. Help him. Time will wear down walls. Help him make more friends, kicking and screaming. But don't push him too much. Coax and give time.
I am not telling you what to do, I am telling you what I would do
again, sorry if this sounds weird-
Have a great day!
Thanks for the review! The person speaking is actually a character from a story I%u2019m writing, is Denise the person she left.
But I%u2019m glad that you enjoyed this, and I%u2019m sorry with all that happened.
Hi names 22Midnight
hope your doing well, let's get into it!
First Impression: This poem definitely had a lot of strong feelings behind it about how selfish some people can be to others who never deserved it, and because of how realistic it was it really made me keep reading to the end.
Just choosing these lines today because I found that they really stuck out to me the most because of how true they are when you put them into real life, you've written every line so well down to the very last word, every part drawing me in even more to carry on, it made me sad from the beginning through to the middle and then to the end.
Overall: it really hit home for how much some one can enjoy another's suffering which is horrible but none the less something that still happens even in real life. I think this was very well written and i wish that it had been given a tun more likes because it deserves it!
anyway that's it from me
hope you have a great dawn/dusk/midnight
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