Heya, star! I see we have another visual poem here. This will be a slightly shorter review because that last one got me tired XD. But I like visual poems. How about I review this one, shall I?
So as this poem is slightly all over the place in terms of consistency with the thing you are relating to, I will go image by image.
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I think this perfectly deals out the counter argument to, "What doesn't kill you makes you stronger." Sure, those papercuts don't kill you, but you don't understand how something can hurt so much and not leave any sign of being there. It's like you want the marks so you can have a valid reason for your pain. I think your use of italics for, "how disappointing," was in great taste. All of these are still your thoughts but when it's italicized it gives a sense that this is your actual thought, and it hasn't been twisted into something more poetic.
Moon
This wouldn't be star poetry without something spacy. So you try to talk to the moon because you're too afraid of the sun. It's like when depressed people seek out other depressed people to talk to because they are the only people who would understand. The moon is also a very personal celestial body to many people. But even with the moon seeming more gentile than the sun, your messages bounce back and strike you through your heart. It's like no one can help you. <33333
Cake
Here's the one where I was confused at how things were to be portrayed. I understand the part about where you told your wishes to your friends, because to my knowledge if you tell your wish it doesn't come true. My point of confusion was when you said,
Could you explain a little? I think I've done well with the past few reviews at trying to decipher what you mean but I'm stumped with this one.now all my candles remain unlit (for i have lost my lighter) but wax melts into the cake anyway.
Bathtub
Here it gets a little morbid and slightly violent if that's the right word. It's like the intrusive thought of you in the tub and just wanting to throw your phone in there to see how you'll feel. Those kind of intrusive thoughts are so scary at time, you don't even know how you've thought it up. But you were going to act upon it but didn't because you don't want to see in innocent duck suffer. Perhaps that is also a way you are saying, "I'm too cowardly to do it but I have a reason for not doing so." It's IntErEsTinG.
Wings
I like how this one ties in with the previous image with the duck. You want to learn how to fly. Flying is associated with weightlessness, so I can infer that you want to feel weightless to forget about the heavy load on your shoulders. But those wings that are supposed to make you fly, are weighing you down. I just think it's beautiful how something so majestic looking can make you feel worse. But then you cut your hair to relieve some of the weight but it always grows back. And again at the end of the image we see another intrusive thought. <33
Thunder Cloud
Now for more intrusive thoughts, I think I'm seeing a pattern now. So I think many kids hid under their covers when a thunderstorm came around. But now you embrace it, wanting to go outside to possible get struck.
I really like this line. And with the little sense of humor it gives and the overall aura of this image is like a crazy laughter.maybe it would restart my stupid heart.
Heart rate
This one is going to be my last one because I don't want this review to take an hour. So you are trying to kill that internal monster that we all have but as your beat is settling out you realize you are the monster. It give me chills! It's as if the monster has overtaken you and your own heart ceases to exist anymore. I think it is a perfect ending to this poem!
Well that's all I have for today. I hope you found some of this useful. Sorry, I didn't have the energy to review some of those other stanzas, but be assured that I loved them all! I'll be back tomorrow (or even today) for some more 2020 star poetry! Anyway byeeeeeeeee<3
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