Kill Me Please

This poem is utterly beautiful.
Honestly, most poems I read that spell something down the side, for lack of a better word, suck. But this one you had clearly put some thought into. And I do truly believe that you feel these words, because when I read them, I can feel them, too. I don't know if there's more to the story or if you just felt like writing something dark and deep, but I'll say this anyway: If you are depressed, or are feeling like the world will be better without you in it, I can tell you that it won't. We all need more beauty in the world. And these words, your words, are beautiful. If you ever need someone to talk to, whether it's serious or you're just bored, message me. I'll be glad to talk whenever I get the chance. Just know that we writers here need you to help us make our own words sound beautiful, and we can't do that if you're gone.
Don't do something that you'll regret!
Full of love and respect,
Smanske15

When a person has gifts such as yours two things tend to happen. Society attempts to crush the fiber of that person's spirit so much that they cease to exist, or at least the person that they like to see in the mirror does. That or aforementioned person sells out and then I am obligated to hate them. After reading this piece I see you aren't a sellout and I have a few words for you: Love, Your, Self. You are a gifted writer and fairly original I like that you combined so many things but my favorite snippet are your lines for "ME". I want them to be a part of me just like they seem to be a part of you. Keep up the good work and stay strong, the people who don't appreciate you for who you are don't deserve the time you spend thinking about them.

Hello!

Emilykay10144 here...

I think this a very deep poem and it is beautiful. I love how you did the KILL ME PLEASE thing, I could never be that smart to think of that and I applaud you! While reading this piece I could feel the emotion, it's like the words were going through my body and I LOVE THAT!

This line,

Kissing my life goodbye
I live though I am not alive,

I think is a great opening and it gets straight to the point and the emotion of the poem. This is my favorite line in the whole poem.

Suicide is the utmost level of freedom,
Excuse me sir, but I do badly need some.

Hey!

Wow... I mean...

This is quite intense. It's straight to the point, emotional, and realistic. What I do sincerely wish, however, is that this doesn't actually apply to you. It's intensity got me worried because writing such wonderful pieces requires a whole lot of distinct emotions, in this case being suicidal. Anyway, I hope everything's alright.

These lines,

"Picturing the world without me
Leaving behind my tragic stories,
Entering bliss like a curse
Asking for something I can not reverse."

make the poem very realistic. People do tend to picture the world without their presence.

Personally, my favourite part was,

"I live though I am not alive,
Leaving as I do not wish to live,
Leaving because I can not survive."

and that is because it makes a lot of sense to me. It's beautifully phrased.


Wonderful poem...

Write more,
Anon