The mid of winter, numb and cold.
The icy splinter, black with mold.
With stains of red upon it's stem
Like liquid rubies, rich red gems.
In time the young ones will be heard,
the golden wind-chime, sweet as birds.
Know not the dreadful sound of guns,
Nor the heat of a thousand suns.
The crimson leaves turn dry and brown,
Upon this death we do not frown.
For it is beauty in it's own,
The blurry colors, all but bone.
And soon the young ones will be wise,
and know to stifle all their cries,
as doves fly in from burning west,
and all their screams are put to rest.
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First, thanks for sharing this poem so brimming with visual imagery. Of course, when imagery is used in poetry the reader will seek a deeper meaning and strive to find an pattern that makes all of the images harmonize and convey a coherent message.
Sometimes this will result in interpretations that the poet didn’t intend. Robert Frost denied all the interpretations of his Stopping By the Woods, poem. The readers saw death in his reference to sleep, and the whole description was understood in a fashion that revolved around a trip through life.
He vehemently denied that he had any such meaning in mind when he wrote it. But one thing that we should keep in mind as poets is that we very often permit the subconscious to take over and the subconscious will indeed employ imagery based on emotion and tat imagery will have layers of meanings that we as writers are totally unaware of sometimes. That having been said, here is how understood the poem.
There is the mention of winter and coldness. The dreadful sound of guns. The heat of a thousand suns. The mention of death. The burning West and the cries of young ones. The blood-red-tinged ice, dusted with mold, bone.
Based on those images some readers might conclude that this is a post-nuclear war scenario. The nuclear blasts are like the heat of the sun and that heat does shrivel whatever vegetation is in its way. A numbing nuclear winter is predicted to ensue after such a war. Much suffering and crying will be heard.
The West as the part of the world harboring such nuclear weapons is usually imagined as a prime participant.
The reference to accepting the vegetation’s dying and comparing it to the necessary death of autumn leaves might be understood as offering hope of re-emergence of civilization after such a nuclear Winter and holocaust. But the suggestion that we see beauty in such a devastation rings hollow. The mention of doves, a symbol of peace, from the burning west indicates that the war is over. Now there will be no longer further reason for the screams of innocent children who are always the victims of foolish decisions made by the adult world. Such children learn to stifle their cries because they soon realize that crying will not change reality. In time their wisdon gained from that experience will be heard.
Now for the structure of the poem itself. Its rhyme scheme is aabb ccdd ffgg hhii with four beats per line of iambic meter. You did an excellent job of remaining true to the rhyme scheme and meter.
The spell checker suggested changing windchime to wind-chime.
The following article seems to confirm that spelling.
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wind_chime
that is DEEP!! Honestly, i don't think im smart enough to think all of that stuff about my own poem! but i really enjoyed reading your review, it 1. make sense 2. was very interesting to read, and i was wondering about the wind-chime thing! thank you for the review, I think I'll try to think about poems like you do, TRY to.
Hullo lolosboing! Cat here to review this cute little poem! Okay then, here we go!
The mid of winter, numb and cold.

First, let's go through your poem together:
Spoiler
The icy splinter, black with mold. (Icy splinter of what?)
With stains of red, upon it's stem (No apostrophe, also, stem of what?)
Like liquid rubies, rich red gems.
In time the young ones will be heard,
the golden windchime, sweet as birds.
Know not the dreadful sound of guns,
Nor the heat of a thousand suns.
The crimson leaves turn dry and brown,
Upon this death we do not frown.
For it is a beauty
inon it's own,The blurry colors, all but bone. (Are you referring to bone as a color?)
And soon the young ones will be wise,
and know to stifle all their cries,
as doves fly in from the burning west,
and all their screams are put to rest.
What I liked:I really enjoyed the imagery and consistent rhyme throughout the poem.
What to fix/improve:Just a couple grammatical stumbles, but other wise good.
Other random comments:I'm not entirely sure what this poem is trying to express, but then again, I'm not the most observant person! xD
Well anyways, nice poem! Good job and keep writing!
hi! thanks for the review! Can you help me? I kinda intentionally put the grammar mistakes in their to make the syllable count match and the rhyming structure to stay stable, but i dont know how to NOT have grammar mistakes and not mess the poem up. I'm scared that if I change something, the poem will have grammar mistakes AND syllable count mess ups and rhyming structure breakdowns. sorry to bother you but could you give me a few suggestions?? (*freaking out)%uD83D%uDE31
No! Don't freak out! BUT, I am defiantly not the right person to go to when it comes to rhyming and syllable count, I'm so bad at it myself! I would recommend asking someone way better at poetry, like @alliyah . She may be able to help you here! I wish I could help, but I can't even do that myself. Sorry!
Right off the bat, the title is rather interesting. ‘My Crimson Splotches’. I like it.

I can appraise how in the second stanza it says
'Know not the dreadful sound of guns,
Nor the heat of a thousand suns.’
It’s very interesting, I’ve never heard that before.
However, I noticed a few grammar mistakes. Nothing to big. Just thought you might wanna know. I really do like this.