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Hey, f4wir. I'm Jet. I've read the first chapter of this that you've posted, and I notice immediately that you've switched the perspective from Dakota to a pack. Perhaps you should make a note of this change, because for the reader, it's slightly odd. Almost as if we're suddenly reading a very different story.

Kasia’s fur – as white as the snow carpeting the forest floor - ruffled in the icy breeze as she trotted alongside Isius, a few paces ahead of Jasmine, the alpha female, and Zeda and Shayne, the youngest of the pack.

Now, this confused me in the first chapter too before I understood the shape-shifting, but I think you need to decide whether you're going to use human terminology - e.g. boyfriend, brother - or wolf terminology, e.g. alpha female. There has to be a consistency, else it's quite odd to read. I think you should definitely use "males" instead of "men" if you're going to refer to "men" - meaning human men, outside the pack - later on.

Since she’d become a shape-shifter

I also think you might take some time to expand on the shape-shifting before you go straight into calling it that. This is a very non-committal way of introducing it.

Not everyone’s a fighter. Jasmine consoled her.

Remember your dialogue punctuation. Occasionally it slips. This should be:

Not everyone's a fighter, Jasmine consoled her.

Zeda darted out from behind Kasia and launched herself at Isius, landing on her head just for a fraction of a second before bouncing off and over the other pack.

This is a nitpick, but I find this really hard to visualise. Is that really a natural movement? Yes, I could see Zeda going over Isius' head, but landing on it? That's a bit much.

Like the above reviewer, I don't really understand the fascination with wolves, but I like the atmosphere here and the way you introduce the other pack. You could probably slow the pace a bit, so we have a bit more of the family dynamic and a fraction more build-up. I was also a little bereft of any clear character interpretations here. Some of the moments were sweet, but Kasia didn't seem more than a cut out. I can see that there's opportunity for that to change with the hook you left here, so I won't comment further than that. Hope to see more of this posted soon.

- Jet.