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Noooooooo! It is really good but I got a few Q's:

"Dumb hick, Sanel muttered. Kasia shot him a derogatory look. smart. And he’s following something... Kasia strained herself to feel further into his aura. Isius tried to follow her train of thought but was led along another. here for backup? In other words, was he a threat? not. Zeda was excited, as always. She bounced on the balls of her paws, her brown tail swishing back and forth rapidly. He’s kinda cute, I mean, as wolves go. Sanel resented this. Zeda had never called him cute, but when they run into a stranger, no, a trespasser, who, quite frankly, smelled bad, she thought he was cute? cute? Oh, calm down, Sanel. Kasia rolled her eyes. She says you’re cute all the damn time; it’s actually kind of annoying. Why couldn’t Zeda and Sanel just admit that they liked each other and skip past all this childishness? childishness?"
. He’s kinda cute, I mean, as wolves go.
Isn't this suppose to be italics sized?
“I gotta go,” Kasia blurted out, “You better get the hell outta here before you end up dead.” She bolted into the forest to aid her pack, leaving the lone wolf very much alone.
I like how you just cut it off here but I think that the 'very much alone' part sounded to evilish. He was traveling alone but no since the intruder came, it sounds like he is with the gray wolf. It was a little confusing...
That is all. I liked it a lot. Please PM me when you post more!