He was feared by all
born to destroy
so intimidating and powerful
the gods themselves ran.
.
He smashed down everything he saw
born to destroy
and took no pity
on the ones who ran.
.
Unstoppable, he raged,
born to destroy
until he became known as
the one who never ran.
.
But the gods destroyed the monster who was
born to destroy
until finally, he had to give up his title
and he ran.
.
He was forced in a prison until he,
born to destroy,
grew too weary to fight. So he just sat there
until he could run no more.
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Hi, Ruby here for a quick review!
Okay, so to begin the subject of this poem drew me in right off the bat, as a lover of all things Mythology. I've read the Percy Jackson series and Typhon was regarded as being the most horrible, feared monster of all- and you really got that point across. The mood of this poem is really great, it has sort of that dramatic and almost angry feel, just like Typhon himself. Saying he was 'born to destroy' was a great way to catch the readers attention right off the bat, and establish just how destructive Typhon CAN be.
The use of the word "ran" at the end of each stanza threw me off a bit at first, but it was a cool choice. You use it in many different ways, applied to different situations and people, which gave the poem a good element as I could imagine all of these different people or monsters just running for their life. I would be running for my life if Typhon was after me, too.
With the structure of this poem, it seemed to be a little bit off. Some of the lines were so long and others so short with no apparent order, so it didn't flow as nicely as it could. Also, the final stanza confused me a bit. Cutting off the sentence in the middle of the line seemed quite abrupt. Eliminating it and combining into one complete thought or adding another line would make it much more clear. But overall, I enjoyed this and look forward to reading more of your Mythology poetry
I really liked the flow of your poem, it had a very good rhythm however I did feel in the fourth stanza the first line was a bit lengthy. The simplicity of the poem was really effective and the repetition of the word ran really pushed the poem along making it more engaging.
I enjoyed it mostly because I just love mythology and seeing gods running from monsters just it makes me happy because it doesn't make them see as mighty even if they did eventually imprison Typhon.
Just one more thing I would think about in the last stanza the first line to get rid of the words "until he" as it would help it flow more and keep the tempo of the poem.
Great poem and I hope to see more of your work.
Thanks for the review!