Caspar and Beverly’s wedding

oo yes another really short piece! I love these <3

Caspar swept Beverly into a kiss, the pipe organ music rising triumphantly as they embraced.

This is a lovely opening. However, I kind of think it would flow better if you cut it into two sentences: 'Caspar swept Beverly into a kiss. As they embraces, the pipe organ music rose triumphantly.' For a short piece, sometimes shorter sentences can make if flow better and not seem so abrupt.

They admired each other since school, and finally, they would be together.

This is super sweet! Again, for a better flow, it could be restructured a little bit to look like this: 'They had admired each other since school. Finally, they could be together!'

Caspar wanted nothing more than to bring Beverly all the joy in the world, for her love had made all of the paint-splattered feelings of his birthday to him, and in her embrace, he knew that she felt the same way about him.

This is quite a long sentence, but it does work. I'm not quite sure that 'for her love had made all of the paint-splattered feelings of his birthday to him,' makes complete sense, although I understand what you were going for. Perhaps:

'Caspar had wanted nothing more than to bring Beverly all the joy in the world. Her love had turned the paint-splattered emotions of his birthday into something beautiful. In her embrace, he knew that she felt the same way about him'

This reads a lot clearer and makes the image of the paint-splattered emotions make a little more sense.

But hands down, she was better than any birthday gift in the world.

This is so a cute ending, a really sweet little short story!! <3

Hi there, vampricone! Dropping by to give you a review. I will be using the YWS'mores method to help structure my review.

The Top Graham Cracker: Judging from the title alone, this sounds like it'll be a good story! I love weddings - they can be so beautiful and so romantic! I like the name choices here, especially Beverly. They seem like older names so it makes me wonder what you have in store for these two characters. Are they ghosts? Is this an old story? Let's take a look.

The Slightly Burnt Marshmallow: I think my only critique with the writing would be this line:

for her love had made all of the paint-splattered feelings of his birthday to him,

I'm a little confused as to what you mean here. What birthday? What does that have to do with the story? I did go back and read the related work, "And so love begins to bloom", but I didn't see any mention of a birthday. Are they getting married on his birthday? And was his birthday formerly associated with something negative, and she is now giving him something positive?

... okay, after rereading, I specifically noticed that you said she was his birthday gift, so I guess that answers that question LOL

The Melty Chocolate Bar Overall, I really enjoyed this! I do wish it was a bit longer, as it would be nice to know a bit more about these characters and their personalities, as well as some imagery regarding the wedding, but despite that, it was good. I enjoyed the way you described their love for each other and how it made Caspar feel, especially on his birthday.

My favorite lines were these:

Caspar swept Beverly into a kiss, the pipe organ music rising triumphantly as they embraced.

The Bottom Graham Cracker: This was really good! Will you be adding more to this in the future? As I said in the previous review, I know you don't usually write happy endings, so I am a little fearful of what will happen to this beautiful couple... please be nice to them... but if you do add more, let me know so I can check it out!

I hope this review was a bit helpful.

~Iggy