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Web of Illusions

by ariah347


In pixels on screens are costumes on parade,

A façade of perfection, a masked masquerade.

On Halloween, the skeletons come out to play,

But on digital playgrounds, they’re hidden far away.

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With filters and captions, we craft our masterful disguise,

Hiding and pulling a wool over each others’ eyes.

Behind profiles, there are identities that are veiled,

And true selves concealed with truths curtailed.

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A fog of fake smothers what is genuine,

We seek validation from strangers online.

Likes, views, comments, followers – the price of fame,

Cancel culture, one wrong move, we’re quick to shame.

🕷

Candy and treats, what we want this haunted hour,

But tricks and thievery hold a real wicked power.

The quest for approval, a never-ending chase,

Is happiness actually found in that virtual space?

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Or is it fleeting at best, like when we wake from our dreams?

Remember, on Halloween and online, nothing is as it seems. 

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Reviewers: Did the emojis show up? Happy hauntings!


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Fri Nov 03, 2023 3:09 pm
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vampricone6783 wrote a review...



Hello there, human! I'm reviewing using the YWS S'more Method today!

Let us commence with the possibly possessed S’more!

Top Graham Cracker -This poem is about Halloween and the internet and how two seemingly different things are more alike than anyone could imagine.

Slightly Burnt Marshmallow -This is just a suggestion, a silly little idea that I have. But you could do it if you want. You could use old-sounding words to make it sound more cryptic and like lost media, to fit the spooky internet poem them. For example: “shall” is “shalt”. But that’s all!

Chocolate Bar - I like how you used Halloween emojis for the poem, it makes it more interesting! (Yes, I see the emojis!) I also like how you compared Halloween to the internet. I would have never thought to do so myself, but when you wrote about it, it made sense!

Closing Graham Cracker -This fits the vibes of October and Spooky Season! Unique and yet still giving the element of scares! I only wish that I reviewed this in October and not November. But, such is life.

Now, have a very lovely day and always have Halloween in your heart! :>




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Tue Oct 31, 2023 3:25 pm
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The emojis do show up.
I never thought of this, but your right Halloween and online are very similar. We hide our true selves either for reasons of being self conscious or maybe we want to harm others. There's many reasons, but on both accounts we conceal who we are. "We seek validation from strangers online.

Likes, views, comments, followers – the price of fame,

Cancel culture, one wrong move, we’re quick to shame."
This was such an interesting and true line. We jump to putting people down the moment they make one wrong move. We forget get they are human and we all do regrettable things. I'm sure almost everyone's heard the term "Your cancelled" get thrown around then moment someone falters. This was really interesting.

I hope you have an amazing day, that's super spooky and cool!




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Mon Oct 30, 2023 1:21 pm
spottedpebble says...



Such a clever comparison. Halloween and the Internet.




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Sun Oct 29, 2023 4:23 pm
JerrodeD says...



I can't help but feel like this poem is a setting for one of those horror movies. I do love how you tried to keep the Halloween spirit. It's an amazing piece and I love it with my full out. Also yes the emojis showed up.





As a former (and rather excellent) liar herself, Aru knew that, sometimes, speaking the truth felt like wrenching a thorn out of your side. But doing the opposite meant pretending it wasn't there. And that made every single step ache. It was no way to live.
— Roshani Chokshi, Aru Shah and the Nectar of Immortality