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Hihi! Here to just leave a lil review

I have to open with... wow! The rhyme? The message? The emotion? The truth? Immaculate. I think this poem has a clear message, one that I heavily relate to. I think poems like these are really important to write and share with others. Evil is all around us, in plain sight and in hiding. Discernment and wisdom is important, but also recognizing we don't have to succumb to it.
My favorite line has to be:

For the devil walks among us, with a mask upon their face

Hello ariah347!

It has been a long time since I've reviewed any of your work!

Right off the bat, this is gorgeous writing. I love how you make the devil seem ordinary. You do very will with descriptions. . . I am a fan of the line
"They have no horns protruding out nor any tail with a spade"
Where it is almost as if you are bashing the myth.

Your language is vivid and descriptive. I am wondering if you are following any particular pattern?

Either way thank you for blessing YWS with your work 🙏

Have an amazing Morning, afternoon, evening, or night! (From wherever you are )

I am interested in your playlist!! (Hope you don't mind :p)

WOW! I saw the title and it instantly reminded me of a song I've been listening to lately with a very similar title ("Dancing with the devil" by Demi Lovato). So, I clicked on this thinking it might be a play on that song. This was so much deeper than I expected!

Your language is vivid and captivating, to the point that I can see the different scenes flashing in my mind as I'm reading it. I also love your use of connotations and tone, emphasizing the severity of each of these situations where the Devil can wreak havoc on a life. You've got me thinking that the Devil is a possible metaphor here, like a metaphor for toxic relationships and lifestyles. But that could just be my experiences making my mind play tricks on me, too.

Love it! I can't wait to read more!

I love this poem! It shows that The Devil is beautiful to entice others, to trick them. Kind of like how people deemed ”beautiful” by the majority of the world can get away with more evils than those who “aren’t”. That’s how I saw it, anyway.

I’m interested in what songs are in your playlist. Could I listen to them?

I hope that you will have a wonderful and amazing day and night.

Hiya! This is Orabella here with a review.

Today, I'll be reviewing using the YWS S'more Method!

Normally I'd love to listen to your playlist, but I am currently unable to access music right now. However, if I ever need to get some demonic songs, I know to come back here.

Top Graham Cracker - What I Know
Your poem is more of a metaphorical meeting with the devil than an actual event. Which is common with poems. It's saying beware the devil, for they are hiding in plain sight. They may be someone you've never even talked to; just someone sitting in a café. But beware of their temptations; don't let them lead you astray. (Haha sorry, but I wanted to rhyme too.)

Slightly Burnt Marshmallow - Room for Improvements
Umm... not much to say here. I'm literally struggling to find something to say at the section, because honestly this is really well done. I guess I feel like a bit of it lasted too long.

Yet, in this devil's presence, there's a lesson to be learned,

For even in the darkest souls, a chance for change may burn.

To see beyond the surface, where the truth may still be earned,

Is to break the spellbound, once and for all adjourned.