A flower that's yet to be picked doesn't know its impending demise.
It grows & reaches its fingertips upward to the sun's glow.
The sun doesn't seek the moon's permission each day to get up & rise.
It ascends regardless if the moon appreciates the show.
☾☼❀
The breeze cares not for the blustering leaves; one by one, they fall.
It swirls through the air, bringing what it carries to the ground.
Leaves ask not how the tree feels as roots grasp dirt lifelines all-in-all.
They simply show their colors before they are all pulled down.
༄ 𓇢𓆸 ⸙
A cup of tea thinks not of coffee but simply to be drank from lips
For each will pour liquid of their choosing to quench their thirst
While the ocean surges its waves even if it hosts no ships
Time's ballad, in rotation, a universe disbursed.
☕︎⏲⛴
Be not within the negative thought
Be in the day, whatever it ought.
Be confined to the right here and right now
Be proud of who you are & take a bow.
-`♡´-
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"The sun doesn't seek the moon's permission each day to get up & rise.
It ascends regardless if the moon appreciates the show."
I can feel your pain in this one, but it seems like you are in the right path of getting rid of a toxic relationship. One day it will be like it never existed, and in the case that it sits still in your mind, it will be something that fuels you. Learn from this and let it take you to new heights.
Stay awesome, and maybe, one day in the future, life will put something in your lap that is worth fighting for, cause that's how good ol' life works.
There was no one relationship hinted here, but the reminder to be who you are, regardless if anyone's opinion or understanding. Thank you for your review <3
Your poem is truly exceptional and displays a remarkable level of creativity and imagination. The manner in which you have masterfully crafted each word and line to create a beautiful tapestry of emotions is truly impressive. Your use of metaphors and similes is impressive and they add a deeper meaning to your poem. The way you have expressed your thoughts and emotions in such a poetic manner is nothing short of brilliant. Your poem has left a lasting impression on me, and I am sure it will do the same for others who read it. Keep up the great work, and I can't wait to read more of your work!
Thank you for your kind words
Hello, my friend!
You have created an incredibly beautiful piece of poetry, here. As I'm reading, I sense this vivid, very natural setting that's incredibly calming and soothing. Speaking to the endless flow of time and nature, and the examples you chose to represent it, creates a kind of liminal space in the mind. Then, your final verse transforms that theme and feeling into something positive for the reader to take away. Like a meditation session condensed into four verses. I could honestly imagine reading this before I start writing, just to clear and focus my thoughts.
The rhymes feel very casual, and likewise, the structure fits the theme; everything flows smoothly, with nothing to take away from the imagery. I couldn't spy any errors, nor could I make any recommendations. Not that I'm a professional anyway, but I would rate this 10/10.
Very nice work!
EEEEEEE! The fact you found this comparable to meditation made my day! You have highlighted my intent with exactness! Thank you for your kind words
Hi there!
My interpretation (I have yet to remember how to spell that and I need to let autocorrect do it for me) of this poem is that it talks about how you should let yourself be your own person, and work and focus on yourself because the world around you isn't going to wait for you. For example, let's say you have terrible procrastination problems. Your history teacher isn't going to wait for you to solve your procrastination issues to give an exam. Like it or not, it doesn't depend on you, so you need to take responsibility and fix yourself. That exam is going to happen regardless. (Heh, personal example with my history exam coming up...)
The writing is immaculate and the rhymes are lovely. The only thing (not really to improve) that stuck out to me is that on line 8, I believe adding an "all" between "are" and "pulled" would make it sound better rhythmically. I'm a music person, and when I was reading that line I felt a beat missing, something that would make it flow nicer with the other lines. It ended too abruptly. I still think "all" is not enough. I'd originally thought "to the ground" after the "down" but you used that two lines before.
Anyways, lovely work! °˖✧◝(⁰▿⁰)◜✧˖°
-Cat
You've interpreted very well! Simply put, the world waits for no one and nature exists without fear or concern of other elements of nature. Thus, people should do the same. I see your point on line 8 and have edited to enhance the rhythm. Thanks for your comments!!! Good luck on your exam!!!!!