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Reflecting Hearts - Ch 11.2- Bon appétit: Serving Truth at Dinner

by ariah347


Warning: This work has been rated 18+ for language and mature content.

Out of nowhere, a gentle tapping on a glass interrupted us. I followed the sound to see my father standing in the center of the room, cup raised. He was never one to shy away from a crowd. A quiet sigh droned out of my mouth as all heads turned toward him, and drinks rose throughout.

“A toast! …On this day of gratitude, let us raise our glasses in celebration.” His eyes met mine from across the room with a foreboding permanence. His words conveyed he was not simply delivering a toast but imparting a lesson.

The clinking of glasses followed, and a chorus of agreement filled the air as he carried on with his speech. “Today, we come together not only as individuals but as a family. Blood in our veins unites us. May we always remember that as most important.”

He lifted his glass higher while his eyes never left mine. “Let us toast to the abundance before us and to the bonds that hold us together. May we never take it for granted. To family and the unbreakable tie that defines us.”

The toast echoed in shouts of ‘Here here’ repeated by several, and many finished the rest of their drinks. A servant opened the doors, calling us to dinner.

The transition from the drawing room to the formal dining room was seamless, a procession of people moving with practiced grace; even the children were well-mannered performers. Prior holidays at home felt nostalgic and comforting. This one was feeling like a bad stomachache.

Inside the dining room, the walls were a deep taupe, and a long, rectangular oak table was exquisitely prepared. It had a pristine white tablecloth and settings of fine china, crystal glassware, and polished silverware near each chair. Taking our seats between Ezekiel and Isadora, my parents positioned across from me, servants served the meal with precision, each dish a vision of culinary excellence.

As plates were presented, conversation flowed around the table. My paternal grandparents, who sat at the head of the table, took a particular interest in Ezekiel. Their questions drew out like the lines on their faces. Zeke handled the attention with admirable composure, answering questions with sincerity and charm. His ease of scrutiny didn’t go unnoticed, and I swelled with pride.

Despite the façade of civility, it was impossible to ignore the tension underneath. I caught my father’s cynical glances and how he whispered veiled comments to no one in particular. Even if he was the patriarch, my grandparents and their approval were most important; their acceptance was a symbolic seal to my family

As twilight shot in through the large windows, dessert arrived, a lavish dish of sweetness that concluded the meal. The scent of chocolate and alcohol engulfed the air. The conversation became softer following the descent of sunset. A few guests left, declining the delicacies.

Among the clinking of dessert forks against plates, my grandmother’s small voice arose, “Dear Abigail, how is your senior year going?”

Wiping my mouth with a napkin, I offered her a warm smile. “Thank you for asking. It’s been quite the journey so far.”

My father, his eyes glassy from the cups of whiskey he had drank, forced a grim laugh. Beneath his breath, his words were a half-muted response, “When she goes to class.”

My glare met his across the table. Zeke, remaining resolute and with quick wit, interjected, “Well, you know, I’ve been a good influence. Abigail hasn’t missed a single lecture.”

A chuckle spread through the room, a strained politeness, a detraction for my father’s drunken behavior. My grandmother added her touch to the exchange. “Ah, the joys of senior year and the trials of attendance. It’s all part of the experience, my dear.”

Then, like a spark igniting a dry forest, an argument erupted. My father laughed grimly. “Yeah, do you know what isn’t a part of the experience?” He didn't wait for anyone to answer, forging ahead with his rant. “Ruining all that has been given to you.”

The atmosphere tightened like a coiled spring. Zeke’s jaw clenched, his fingers subtly gripping his knees, displaying his restraint. My head pounded as I fought to keep my voice strong. “Father, this isn’t the time or place for this discussion.”

But the whiskey had loosened my father’s control, and he barreled on, his voice louder, carrying a deep bite. “You bring an outsider into my home and expect me not to say anything? You don’t understand, Abigail. My sweet angel, you are so sheltered from the reaction you cause.”

Zeke’s eyes remained fixated on his plate, his knuckles turning as white as his button-up, his posture rigid, with his muscular shoulders pulled tight in a forward position. His silence was heavy, the struggle to hold back words that might further escalate the situation. Although his eyes hadn’t moved, his staring was unfocused, showing his mind was elsewhere.

My mother attempted to intervene, her voice soothing but with little effect, “Now, Alek, let’s not ruin the evening.”

Paying her no mind, my father’s relenting continued. “This young man...” He gestured across the table with disgust. “…Has no place in our world. You can’t throw away everything for some romantic notion. It was one thing to have a little hobby in art. It is entirely different to bring this here.”

Zeke’s restraint shattered like glass, his voice cutting through with firm control. “Mr. Winslow, with all due respect, I may not come from the same background, but I love your daughter. I respect her and will do everything possible to make her happy.”

The room fell into a thick silence, and the hushed whisperings about our exchange quieted. I froze. Had I heard him correctly?

My father’s eyes blazed but were also desperate. “Abigail, don’t be foolish. He doesn’t love you! He loves our money!”

Zeke rose from his chair in one fluid motion. As he stood, his spine seemed to straighten. His previously tense shoulders pulled back. With his jaw set, his hands hung at his sides, balled into clenched fists.

“Sir, you don’t know a damn thing about me.”

The standoff between them was a clash of wills and egos. I glanced at both of them, and part of me hoped a resolution would come from the wreckage, but I knew it wasn’t likely.

My father’s gaze remained on Zeke’s, neither looking away from the other. “Abigail, he will destroy your life.”

I stood on shaky legs, shoving the chair behind me. “The only one destroying my life is YOU!” I marched toward the exit, but Zeke did not follow. 


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Hello Again, My Friend!

It's me, Raven, and I'd like to review the next chapter in this great story using my Familiar method! Let's dive in, shall we? Heh heh heh...

What The Black Eyes See...

Honestly...the chapter title sums up my first impressions perfectly XD. Let's get into the details though.

Where The Dagger Points...

I had nothing to put here this time!

Why The Grin Widened...

Oh boy, that toast. The way you described that glare was enough warning, but it just progressively got worse when you think about the "lesson" within. Especially here:

“Let us toast to the abundance before us and to the bonds that hold us together. May we never take it for granted. To family and the unbreakable tie that defines us.”


Yeah...Sure. Great message. *eyeroll intensifies*

Abigail describing the change of atmosphere from nostalgic and kind to a "stomachache" says a lot about how she's disconnected from this image of the "proper" family. But on a brighter note...

Zeke handled the attention with admirable composure, answering questions with sincerity and charm. His ease of scrutiny didn’t go unnoticed, and I swelled with pride.


Dang! Zeke's charm works even under pressure like this, and he seems to be slowly winning over the grandparents at least -the head Winslows. That's a good sign!

A chuckle spread through the room, a strained politeness, a detraction for my father’s drunken behavior. My grandmother added her touch to the exchange. “Ah, the joys of senior year and the trials of attendance. It’s all part of the experience, my dear.”


Strained or not, politeness is politeness! Another good sign! Plus, the grandmother's sweet, nostalgic words just immediately softened the mood. But just like the Halloween party, I'm starting to expect something to go awry, especially considering Abigail's father is already on-edge.

Sure enough, that following exchange was amazing; Abigail's father really lost control with that condescending angry tone, erupting over essentially nothing, while Zeke and Abigail herself showed an amazing amount of self-control and good composure. And when Zeke finally is forced to reply...

Zeke’s restraint shattered like glass, his voice cutting through with firm control. “Mr. Winslow, with all due respect, I may not come from the same background, but I love your daughter. I respect her and will do everything possible to make her happy.”


Oh man, was that great! He's not resorting to cheap insults or yelling, just showing his boundaries and stating a blatant fact. As satisfying as it would be to see something more along the lines of "a sick burn" or something, god knows it would only be a temporary high that fixes nothing. Again, great choices on behalf of Zeke, showing he knows better than to stoop to these peoples' level even when under direct fire. and I can only imagine what's going on in his head. Ooo...

My father’s eyes blazed but were also desperate. “Abigail, don’t be foolish. He doesn’t love you! He loves our money!”


Ooo, mixed reaction to this line. I mean technically speaking, he has a point; Zeke initially only showed interest in dating Abigail to siphon money from her family, and I can see how that would be a risk to someone from a privileged family -never knowing who is a real friend and who's fake. Alright, something a father could have genuine concerns about. But the way he handled it, and saying it now, in this manner, to Abigail's face with Zeke standing right there? NOPE! Does not justify anything he's done in trying to handle this. Honestly, Zeke just really makes him show his true colors...

I stood on shaky legs, shoving the chair behind me. “The only one destroying my life is YOU!” I marched toward the exit, but Zeke did not follow.


Oh snap! This chapter is, indeed, serving truth for dinner! And walking out was a good decision on Abigail's behalf, as frustrating as that must've been for her. Between that outburst and the tension in the room, it's hard not to empathize with her.

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Overall, awesome chapter to stir up some drama over this dinner, nicely done! :D

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Hello, hello, I am back! I hope you are having a beautiful day today! Let's jump right into this review and not waste any time:

As plates were presented, conversation flowed around the table. My paternal grandparents, who sat at the head of the table, took a particular interest in Ezekiel. Their questions drew out like the lines on their faces. Zeke handled the attention with admirable composure, answering questions with sincerity and charm. His ease of scrutiny didn’t go unnoticed, and I swelled with pride.


^ I loved these lines above. So many details! This seems to be a section with only observations about the external situation and not a lot of emotional stuff. Maybe adding a line in there somewhere, between this section and the other paragraphs around it, would be helpful. I really admire how you can follow a train of thought and observation for so so long and still have it run so smoothly along.

My mother attempted to intervene, her voice soothing but with little effect, “Now, Alek, let’s not ruin the evening.”


The speaking parts feel very natural and flows well. They don't seem fake but seem like something I would actually hear in real life, so epic job with all of that. Not just in this part but your entire novel overall!

“Sir, you don’t know a damn thing about me.”

The standoff between them was a clash of wills and egos. I glanced at both of them, and part of me hoped a resolution would come from the wreckage, but I knew it wasn’t likely.


OOH! Some conflict here!! Zeke is brave here, standing up to her father. The stand off between egos was a wonderful way to describe this scene. I am very excited to see what happens next and see how they will recover from this. Great work, overall I loved this chapter, as always.

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