As EllieMae has said, this is quite the unique format for an poem. So, I do have an little more to say than ever. Let me get on with my review.
So, I honestly love the concept. The pie chart is both funny and really useful despite its poetic nature. The fact that you modeled it from an school course is quite great. And as an mainly traditional poet, this really inspires me.
My more constructive thoughts are regarding smaller, line-level things. For example, believe is spelled "belive" and some of the punctuation is missing. To fix this, going through an basic spell and grammar check would be just fine. Nothing major should be done, but considering English grammar/punctuation rules is always important, especially for publicly sharing work.
Overall, I love the poem and I hope you can continue. Thank you for reading.
- Purple67
Points: 493
Reviews: 28
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