Hi! This is a random weirdo here to give you a short review.
This is a very short but interesting poem. Now, I don't know much about sports, but I'm assuming it's baseball? (Tell me if I'm wrong, and sorry if I am)
The young scout sure seems talented, especially with so little preparation. Going against older and more knowledgeable kids in sports is unnerving. (I draw from experience; I was once on a basketball team in a similar situation. We didn't have enough players and most of them were older. So was the other team.)
Only one thing I noticed that threw me off a little:
The young scout is unbelieved at what he did
I'm not sure unbelieved is a word. Even if it is, it sounds a little off. Try rephrasing?
In all, this is very well written, and the pace is excellent.
Keep writing!
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