This poem was almost as if reading a story, a very fascinating story. Writing the exact day even make it seem more interesting. It's really amazing if you're able to create a vivid image in the reader's mind with just a few words, you did great.
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"I stay put
I watch the fire tower over and out of the box
I stare at it, eyes all aglow
My face is hot, red hot"
I love this part, it gives a feeling that is indescribable and yet very fascinating.
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The second part seems very sad. It's wonderful how you were able to mix such a deep emotion with words.
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"Silence for the Man
The Man who was
Taken
Too
Soon"
This part is just beautiful, it lets you know that everyone matters but everyone goes one time too.
You did a wonderful job.
All the best,
Rose
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