Kemp 4/16/2023
A boy I’d known for a while
Getting what he’d strived for
What most of us strive for
Eagle
I remember helping with the flagpole
Which stands proudly at his school
The people who know him talk about him
His motivation to get Eagle
Him not taking no for an answer
Him being a leader and a mentor to many
His parents walk up and they thank us all for
Contributing something towards The Eagle’s life
Then The Eagle talks
He thanks all for helping him achieve this high honor
He then pulls out the case
The Challenge Coin he received
Not to keep, but to give
To give to another scout, to challenge them
To be an Eagle
I take a deep breath
I’m nervous
Who will he choose?
He calls my name
…
My heart’s beating out of my chest and I walk up, excited, and
I shake The Eagle’s hand, gripping the cold, metal coin, in my hand.
And I smile, knowing he would pick me
“Thank you.”
“Didja think you weren’t gonna get it?”
I was the only one to get a coin that day
A Coin from The Eagle
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Hullo there!
I decided to read the three experiences and then make a big review.
You seem in your poems to describe moments that stick to you. And I think you did good in describing them. You painted very vivid descriptions of the scenes and did well in taking us to a "present time". Keep going in this direction!
I think you could improve even more by intertwining your emotions in it. Work with what those scenes made you feel. What you experienced is potent for poems, but what do they mean in a bigger picture, that I want to know!
Thank you!
This work is astounding and underrated it has so much emotion to it 5stars
I like the premise of a talking eagle it adds a certain fantasy but mixed with realistic fiction vibe I’d love to see more of your work and it really shows how special it feels to be chosen I hope that others can see this amazing story great job