On the brink.

I enjoyed the poem as a whole
But I did feel like you could have added more
"I have flown through the air,

I have soared:

To the pool far below;

From the high diving board. "
I am not trying to be rude at all.
But this is not a good ending
You want your ending to be powerful
Maybe go back and add more
And this could go somewhere

Hello there Fiendy! I'm here to review -- and for stating the obvious...

So let's get cracking!

OK, so I really enjoyed reading this poem. Not only was it lighthearted and free -- which isn't something you come across very often, to tell you the truth -- it also managed to make me smile. You took such a small idea as jumping off a diving board and turned it into a poem, and I admire that. You made use of personification as well in the third stanza, and it was a delight reading about the wind "screaming." You really turned the tables there; we're not as frightened as we think we are. Great work! However, I noticed that you'd written the first three stanzas in three lines, but the last one was following an ABCB pattern as opposed to the rest of the poem. Instead of harping on about it here, I'll just cover the technicalities in one go, shall I?


Technical

I stand at the brink,

toes poke over the edge,

and in I stand at the brink on the ledge.

The part in bold just didn't flow right. What were you standing in? Fright? Ecstasy? Apprehension? It wasn't very clear. I'd suggest you lengthen that part and then divide "at the brink on the ledge" as a fourth line. That would create the same pattern you have in the last stanza, because if you were to have an ABB pattern, then the third line would feel overly long. I liked your description of "toes poking over the edge." It symbolized a bird steeling itself to fly for the first time and created a very clear image in our mind. Very nice!

I leap!

And fly through the air,

and sharpened wind screams through my long flowing hair.

The first line seems to be a little short. It's snappy though, and I like it. But it sort of ruins the rhythm. At least, for me it did. How about something like: "Oh, I leap! Oh, I bound!" or something like that? This is just me making a suggestion here. Also, I spy another ABB pattern here. You could divide this up so it would be:

I leap!

And fly through the air,

and sharpened wind screams

through my long flowing hair.

I absolutely love the personification you've used here! Brilliant!

Truly magnificent my friend! A wonderful double-meaninged poem of truthfulness and such-like.
my only complaint is the rhyming pattern of A_B_B which, which i do not like. (my latent developing OCD) but it is very good, i do like the length as well, for some things are just too long to read and review.