The forces of good, as one, unite,
a single strength from several's might,
and all under one banner fight,
so we can crush the French!
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England, Scotland, Wales as one;
their might a great collective sum
and we shall make the cowards run,
and try to crush the French!
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And as the British banner flies,
'gainst bright blue backdrop of foreign skies...
wait a mo'-we're both allies!
Greetings to the French!
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-(This poem is for humourous purposes only and any viewpoints expressed are in no way intended to cause offence. So there. Terms and conditions apply. )
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When I read through this poem I felt like it a marching beat! I can hear the drums and the call to war!
(so do all the European countries want to crush France?)
But I love the original idea.
All poetry should be a sort of inner reflection so I'm interested to see the inspiration behind this one XD
"And as the British banner flies,
'gainst bright blue backdrop of foreign skies..."
Lovely alliteration here
Look forward to more!
-Oracle
Here, I want you to meet this nice lady. Her name is Joan. Hope you get along! :p
Just the light teasing of the bad past the UK and France have between each other is wonderful! (Is it bad that I couldn't stop thinking of England and France from Hetalia? xD)
Seriously, though, this was a pretty cute poem.
Thanks, nice to know people still read my poems! Well I say poems, but here it's more kinda humourous dogeral.
Hi, Verser here to review.
This poem reminds me of Shel Silverstein, professional and beautiful.
It feels refreshing to finally read a happy poem for a change, It's easy to make sad poems, their are many things to be sad about and I think it comes naturally to some people. But I believe it takes an innovative mind to make a happy poem, and do it correctly.
Just one thing, it says "Wait, mo, we're both allies!" I think you were trying to spell no, small mistake, but...just saying. Thanks for the great poem
It says, wait a mo', being short for moment.
Thanks for the review!
Hello there Fiendy! Pompadour here for a quick review!
So, as a history nut, this poem really made sense to me, and I must admit that I found it rather funny. The rivalry between France and Britain, the several wars and so on have always fascinated and amused me.
Your poem did just that. It flowed pretty smoothly and had this quirky rhythm when I read it out loud. Great work!
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I liked the last stanza best. The "wait a mo' - we're all allies!" really made me laugh. Nice poem you've got here. c:
Keep writing! Keep it up!
Cheers,
~Pompadour
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Liked. ^_^
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Hey Pinkdinosaurs here to review you
I really like how you made this poem into a hilarious joke yet still a poem. It's a great way to brighten people up and spark their day with a little fun. Anyway great funny way to start the poem and a lovely way to finish it as well.
Have a great day/night
~From Pinkdinosaurs x.
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The possessive is unnecessary, and it broke the reading flow for me. I had to stop and reread to get it to mentally read right. I'd especially recommend deleting the apostrophe+s, since the succeeding stanzas have the same feel as "several" by itself does. It enhances not only that stanza but the entire poem to revise it to "several" and gives it a more sophisticated feel than it already has.
I chuckled at the ending. Pretty good point. (I will not, however, try to read some political meaning into this poem, since it was intended to be humorous.)
On another technical note, you can add white space without the hyphens visible by doing the following:
[color=#FFFFFF]Add as many hyphens as your heart desires[/color]That renders the hyphens 'invisible', since they're now in white font color.
Hope this helps!
Lol, this was awesome!
The last two lines are the best, as this is exactly how it seems in the history books, and I wouldn't be a bit surprised if that is the actual way it happened.
Here's my only nitpick, it is spelled 'skies' not 'skys.' But that's minor, and it's just a silly grammar, so I wouldn't worry much about it.
Very creative, and if anyone is offended by this, I would be surprised.
Thank you TakeThatYouFiend!
I always make that mistake! Thanks!
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